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Free verse № 63223

Restraint

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Sep 2003 · 2 comments

There is a Japanese man in a bed ten feet away. I do not know if he sleeps or if he lay awake listening to the quiet grumblings of our agitated bed as it tolerates our mischief We do our best to sooth these ascetic complaints with a slower and less salacious caress attempting (for the moment) to behave ourselves but I still wonder if maybe Yuki is listening to us.

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[n/a] Retaliate 2-Sep-03/12:32 AM Reply
Slower and leSS SalaciouS careSS... umm yummy
[9] http://mulberryfairy 2-Sep-03/10:52 AM Reply
"Yuki" indeed! At least my narrator did it in the car. Be considerate, you snake. But you did provoke some nostalgia for me, you know, the good old days of having sex in college dormrooms while roommates "sleep".