Re: Summertime by KatieKaBoom	10-Jun-02/6:24 PM
I don't get the "and so clearly defined" in the context of the rest of the piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-02/12:23 AM
very cute. I don't know why, but I really like it; it evokes something, but I can't see how. Intellectually, I don't get it.
Re: For settle by gothwalk	12-Jun-02/12:25 AM
third line falters for me with "that the" -- it's hard to read it with the proper stress. the rest is cute... though sixty-nine packets?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-02/12:26 AM
huh? just so long as the need to bite your nails doesn't drive you to smoking instead. biting your nails is a much tamer way to tame the oral habit.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-02/12:27 AM
huh?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-02/12:28 AM
no thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-02/12:30 AM
well put.
Re: A Storm For Me by KatieKaBoom	12-Jun-02/12:36 AM
(it's == it is; its == possessive) cute. I like the dark tint to it; think you could develop that.
Re: Lowest Common Currency by unknown	12-Jun-02/12:37 AM
erm, huh?
Re: Drinking Gravel by unknown	12-Jun-02/2:07 AM
I have to give this one a definite thumbs "huh?".
Re: Fascination by ObiWonKn	12-Jun-02/2:09 AM
well put.
Re: Angelic Triumvirate by Sterling5583	12-Jun-02/2:13 AM
this seems extremely forced.
Re: frustration is the lamp i'm holding by silvertongueddevil	12-Jun-02/2:21 AM
cute. :)
Re: endless eternity: by Sapphire	12-Jun-02/2:22 AM
"suckles of" -> "suckles off" "natures" -> "nature's" "all the while man remains blind" -- flow seems off here. and on the next line. actually, from there down, it seems a bit off.
Re: i am on the carpet by silvertongueddevil	12-Jun-02/2:24 AM
this I really, really like. =)
Re: To the Storm - A Final Prayer by Satine	20-Jun-02/12:49 PM
s1 line 4 breaks the rhythm you were building. "lightning flashes true its lies" is awkward and confusing, for me -- true can mean different things, and which it you're referring to can be taken different ways... s4 line 4 also has an extra syllable ... or if it doesn't (i'm not counting) it sure feels like it does. overall, I found the poem sweet if a bit simplistic. If I hadn't stumbled over the three things above I think I would have liked it more.
Re: Waiting to understand by Cha no Onna	20-Jun-02/12:51 PM
yesterwhen? yesterwhen. I like that. the piece is interesting, but I couldn't get into it.
Re: every bite remembers in my skin by silvertongueddevil	20-Jun-02/12:53 PM
your's is not a word. ["your is"? makes no sense] tongue plunging into cream isn't an image I grok. this poem reads jerkily, almost painfully, but... that works. I think I'd still prefer it if it flowed more easily, but. that might just be me.
Re: The MV-perience by Modulo	20-Jun-02/12:56 PM
I can't figure out the point-of-view or context for this.
Re: Hey! by Cha no Onna	27-Jun-02/2:48 PM
Hey, I like this. =)