Re: Your judge is you by dilips_10	27-Jun-02/2:49 PM
a good point, but I couldn't get into the feel of the piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Jun-02/12:53 PM
hell, this is beautiful. =)
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Jul-02/1:57 PM
uhhhhhhh. huh. nuhuh.
Re: Another Faceless Vulgar by danzigg	5-Jul-02/10:19 AM
Overall, I like this, but I'm not sure where South Station is and how it relates to the rest of the piece. Also, I like a bit more cadence in what I read and I couldn't find it here.
Re: Luicidity by LucidRevelation	5-Jul-02/10:20 AM
beautiful. =)
Re: Crimson Diaries by Jsylum	5-Jul-02/10:22 AM
the end lines made me laugh out loud and definitely made the poem for me -- I wasn't really into it until then -- I stumbled through lines 3-9.
Re: Lost by Jsylum	5-Jul-02/10:28 AM
the material doesn't interest me much, but the tone and rhythm are compelling, and the word choice poignant. :) heh. i said poignant. ;) but seriously, very cool. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Jul-02/1:46 PM
it's a nice sentiment but I can't say that I got out of the poem what you wanted me to. It doesn't feel like poetry to me -- I need imagery or cadence or something to latch on to.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Jul-02/1:48 PM
cute. =)
Re: lurcher for lunch - for James Kelman by roy rocket	5-Jul-02/1:48 PM
cute, but I've seen better...
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-02/4:59 PM
did you mean defection or defects? I realize defect doesn't rhyme but defection means something entirely different... all in all, I rather liked this poem. it's very erratic in flow, but somehow it holds together despite that and the subject matter.
Re: Bitch! by venusdemilo	8-Jul-02/5:21 PM
cute, but doesn't do much for me.
Re: untitled by venusdemilo	8-Jul-02/5:32 PM
I like what you're saying here a lot, but stumble through how you say it.
Re: Let's Do a Test by GAC	8-Jul-02/7:55 PM
very cute. :) [note: whate'er, not whate're]
Re: Whispers of the Night by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	8-Jul-02/9:23 PM
so long as you're still having fun. :) actually, I rather like "the air is brown with sound".
Re: Through the eyes of life by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:00 AM
until has one l. I don't understand "of mind". our hearts *were* beating hase -> has. se -> see. a cute poem, but didn't really move me.
Re: trapoide by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:02 AM
definitely confusioned. :) fatality, unless you're punning off of fate? and I don't get "so know it comes" as know or now... they both lose me. illousion doesn't have the first o. and I can't even begin to guess what "trapoide" is. I'd say this is more freeform than ode.
Re: just like the jagged dagger by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:07 AM
"cannot speak no more" do you mean "can speak no more/cannot speak any more"? sliceing -> slicing. barried -> buried. hurt's shouldn't have an apostrophe. apostrophes replace letters. (and until has one l). I'm having trouble getting what you're saying; I keep getting hung up on little confusions: "beneath my shallow bends" -- what are your bends? shallow? why does cutting your feet bruise you? wouldn't it bleed you instead? red? The comparison to the dagger is vague... if you're the dagger, then aren't you using yourself to use yourself to use yourself to use yourself against yourself? I can remember being 14 in texas. (port arthur) I don't really want to. :)
Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil	9-Jul-02/3:08 AM
that's pretty cool. I think you would be considered rather crazy. :) I like, though.
Re: mother venus by elmundo	9-Jul-02/3:12 AM
ecstasy? effigy. cute, overall. pleasant.