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Whispers of the Night (Free verse) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. Footsteps in the hallway
A door openeth
Then closeth
The flick of a switch
And a shuffling of feet
Then the wond'rous sound
Of bountiful flesh
As it meets a porcelain realm
A brief pause
A wail
Then still
The air is brown with sound.
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Posted: June 6, 2002 10:16 PM PDT; Last modified: June 6, 2002 10:16 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.809688 Overall Rank: 1650 Comments:
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This has the feel of Edgar Allen Poe's The Tell-Tale heart. for some twisted reason, I like the mysterious feel to your poem.
Yes it is rather mysterious, isn't it? Indeede, Eggdar Allen Poe was heavily influenced by my work.
you mean your poem was influenced by his work... and not the other way around....
As a matter of fact, I think he means that you're a dick.
so long as you're still having fun. :)
actually, I rather like "the air is brown with sound".
Dark angel i think you dont ever have a clue about any of your poems what they mean I get the impression you are always taking the mick but you could be a talented poet if you put your mind to that instead of being so crass.
once when i was doing a sick stint in the military. They kicked this "cat" out for rolling up his shit and playing marbles with it. His wails rose to the sky like key lime pie, they put him on 24 hour suicide watch with the bed wetters and sleepwalkers. gotta go time for tea
wut u take this out some old corny hooror movie before u rag on others try learnnin somthin from ur long line of poets
You know what I really like this poem, you just have to read and understand it. You have to look beyond words and go deeper than that. You always have to think, what was the writer thinking at that moment what was the writer feeling. I think this is a magnificent peice I like your work dark_angel, keep up the magnificent work.
Thanks KittyKitty. At least someone appreciates work that comes from the heart. And you're absolutely right -- poetry is all about interpretations. I hope you were able look beyond the words in this piece, and perhaps gain a deeper insight into its true meaning. I'd be really grateful if you could tell me what my poeme means to you. And remember: there isn't necessarily a single right, wrong or meaningful answer. They're all part of life's brown tapestry. -10-
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