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Luicidity (Free verse) by LucidRevelation
I won't stick to you like glue I'll just hinder and never surrender I'll drift by you like smoke that curls around your damn beautiful face like the catch in your throat. -- I'll grace you with my presence while you inhale my essence and then deeply exhale me when you have soaked up all my salty sugary poisons I'll pollute your body and inhibit your mind killing you slowly softly -- Each time you take a long hard drag I won't be far away

Up the ladder: i spin you like a top
Down the ladder: Give me beer!

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.8333335
Weighted score: 4.878157
Overall Rank: 10312
Posted: May 11, 2002 11:24 AM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 11:24 AM PDT
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Comments:
[9] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 5-Jul-02/10:20 AM | Reply
beautiful. =)
[6] FreeFormFixation @ 216.125.247.11 | 9-Oct-03/9:49 PM | Reply
smoking is fun! but seriously, i enjoyed this. smoke is a wonderful device to describe fluidity and infiltration.
[5] deleted user @ 65.100.220.228 | 24-Jul-04/7:50 PM | Reply
are you a cigarette?
ah, well, you almost tricked me.
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