regarding some deleted poem...	9-Sep-02/7:20 PM
hmm. a bit overwrought. "bitten away by mad frozen dogs too cold to bark" did it in for me. overall well done, though...
Re: grope by Mister Cakes	9-Sep-02/7:21 PM
flange?
Re: Learning by OneFingerAnswer	9-Sep-02/7:22 PM
awkward to read, couldn't get into a rhythm; the sentiment doesn't do anything new for me or move me.
Re: Leaf on the wind by troll454	10-Sep-02/1:55 PM
I can't say this moved me.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/1:59 PM
:blink: amusing, for a bit. way too long to keep me interested. and of course, nobody could really consider it a poem unless they were trying to pick a fight. but whatever. :)
Re: Russian Roulette by <~>	10-Sep-02/2:03 PM
hmm. this was too proselike for my taste, and the intro ditty really didn't do it for me. the "form" is somewhat interesting, but could still _flow_ better.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/2:38 PM
this scans well, but doesn't say much to me. the first stanza seems to contradict the last without the two middle ones supporting that...?
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/2:38 PM
why oh why did you put this all on one line?
Re: Thank You Mom by savannah	10-Sep-02/3:49 PM
I think it would take a mother to love this. Which is what it was meant for. I'm sure she did. However, there's little of artistic merit in it. It's rather painful to read for those not involved with it.
Re: Putney at Low Tide by Christof	10-Sep-02/3:53 PM
weird. I really can't understand the second stanza for the life of me. I like the sounds the poem makes. It took reading the comments to see where the last stanza was coming from. Maybe if you only capitalized the beginning of sentences it would be more obvious that the last stanza followes the previous. weird.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/9:10 PM
hmm. This poem is a bit repetitive, and unpleasant to read. I can appreciate the sentiment, but I feel like I'm being hit upside the head with a semi that accidentally drove off the side of a cliff. I think perhaps you could have focused on a couple of the images and entwined them somehow to give the piece more cohesion.
Re: Lysander cried by bornagainpoet	11-Sep-02/10:13 AM
it's cute. If Lysander is someone I'm expected to know, I don't get it. If Lysander is you, my personal opinion is to keep personal names out of things. I can't really empathise with it when I'm being jolted out like that. Also, the scan/rhythm/flow/whatnot could use a little work; maybe just fixing the grammar or making a proper nod to it would do it.
Re: None by poemreader	11-Sep-02/10:16 AM
I'm confused. Oh, I see -- I was reading "two of four children, including me as one" to mean you were one of the two... which made the rest of the poem very skewed. The actual rhythm of the poem I find overly halting, stopstarting, and repetitive -- it drones. I'm left mildly curious as to what's happened to or with them.
Re: Tryst by <~>	11-Sep-02/12:30 PM
very nice. =) I haven't seen a limerick done "poetically" in my life, I think.
Re: Z higher of arts by ==Doylum	11-Sep-02/12:32 PM
several bits where the lines don't fit the form; rather hurts tromping through a limerick and you hit one of those bits.
Re: Incidentally, you might want to look up 'Amplexus' by Shin-Bojangles	11-Sep-02/12:34 PM
you're right, I did want to look up amplexus. Though I have trouble seeing the girl as a frog. I like the stretch of ex-treme-ely. :)
Re: One night stand by pkdrunner	11-Sep-02/12:34 PM
cute.
Re: Our lord and saviour, the land of 60 million micks, as wonderful and noble as the pink empire. by ==Doylum	11-Sep-02/12:38 PM
how is this a limerick? what was it in response to?
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-02/12:39 PM
meh. doesn't quite work.
Re: Unfortunate Semen Incident by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	11-Sep-02/12:40 PM
HILARIOUS. though "hierarchy" doesn't quite fit the rhyme. it would be close to perfect if it did.