Re: The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	3-Sep-03/11:06 AM
this line that you love so well is flawed: as the pen, dragged too deep i' the page in passion i' and in are the same? how's: as the pen, heavy with passion, dragged too deep i' the page, gouged it, destroying the subsatntive beauty therein.
Re: a comment on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	3-Sep-03/11:04 AM
don't trash it. cut it apart. put it aside for a week, and come back to it. have a crack at it from a different angle--maybe dq's point of view? an imagined one, if not an actual one? don't trrash it! the point CAN be made. introduce specifics--from the text or otherwise--to make your point. do not rely on the reader's knowledge, nor on abstracts to make your point. it's a good idea. stick with it.
Re: a comment on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	3-Sep-03/10:53 AM
that's not the way i do things lee. ganging up on someone who is honestly trying to make you think--that's a poor solution. how many times would i have burned at the stake, were that the case? at least he is gentler about it than i am. you are not evil. you are hopped up about something, though, that's for damn sure. when was the last time you got laid? drunk? went swimming? anything? release, boy, release!
Re: a comment on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	3-Sep-03/10:50 AM
no, i knew that dq was a character, but without a deep familiarity with the text, your message is lost on me. i have merely surface knowledge--to know the author, the character, the quest-- so, if you want to leave this poem to reveal its message only to those with cervantes fresh in thier minds, i don't see a problem with writing to an erudite audience. but you see, i am no dunce, and try as i might, i cannot unravel it. and, hatters hare is probably the most intelligent person i know, and she gave you some valid crit. i am merely trying to show you that you are not communicating clearly. where is the point in writing a poem like this, if no one gets the joke? maybe h gets it--he's a sponge for info. but, without more context clues--like the tidbit you left out about the head being held up--i am at a loss. you are welcome for the humor. i only wish it had transgressed into understanding.
Re: a comment on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	3-Sep-03/9:42 AM
so dq beheads his creator, in order to maintain his own existence? but if c is beheaded--head held alost by dq--how does he stumble away, unless he's avian? humans tend to drop flat, not stumble once relieved of their head. is this what you were driving at? ai taking over? if it is, then man, you've got some bends in the road to get us there.
Re: a comment on The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	2-Sep-03/9:39 PM
is a knowledge of cervantes necessary to this revelation? i have none, sir, but i will look again in the morning, hopefully with a clearer mind.
Re: The empty room by INTRANSIT	2-Sep-03/7:10 PM
but you came? and i agree with hh about the inversion.
Re: The Banishment of Don Quixote by abecedarian	2-Sep-03/7:05 PM
what has changed?
Re: Idle by Irischer Junge	2-Sep-03/9:16 AM
maybe she has gone to her reward?
Re: Broken by Irischer Junge	2-Sep-03/9:15 AM
we are always dying. from the moment we are born, from the very first intake into our lungs, we begin to count out the time until we cease to draw air.
Re: a comment on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>	2-Sep-03/9:10 AM
it's not that i _mind_ people touching themselves when theyr ead my poems...it's just that this is not the first one that comes to mind when i think of my more provocative efforts... you are a strange laddie, sir.
Re: Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy	1-Sep-03/8:17 PM
even though it was a nectarine?
Re: Part I: The Peach by http://mulberryfairy	1-Sep-03/8:15 PM
i do not believe tat it was the nourishment you would not let drip away, but rather, the sweetness. yes?
Re: a comment on goofy poem to prove I'm not morbid (Ode to an Onion) by greym0on	1-Sep-03/8:00 PM
girls--don't have 'plums'. ask around. report the results.
Re: Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge	1-Sep-03/7:43 PM
what if i'm jewish? am i invalid?
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:56 PM
here's a little treat for you, to lighten the situation: http://www.moderndrunkardmagazine.com/issues/01-02/01_02_booze_rules.htm
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:54 PM
holy shit. talk about a complex! listen closely: I WAS NOT REFERRING TO YOU. I WAS NOT SLANDERING YOU. I WAS TALKING ABOUT PEOPLE IN GENERAL, AND HOW THEY TREAT OTHER PEOPLE. we were talking about races, weren't we? what the fuck, lee? miss dream princess? come on now. you know better than that. dream princess! that's a fucking first. actually, i don't give a shit who you are. i don't care how you stumble around. you care about the writing. you make decent poems when you try, you are fair when criticizing others. that. is. all. i. give. a fuck. about. here. sorry you took it to heart. that's not at all how it was meant. i guess this topic was done a long time ago.
Re: a comment on Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	28-Aug-03/6:02 PM
you will please note that the word 'hurt' was in quotes? thank you. essentially, what i am doing is refusing to feed in to the victim mentality. i refuse to acknowledge the difference that skin color can cause. you have my respect until you prove yourself unworthy of it. end of story. i don't give a fuck who you are: i watch how you treat other people, and that's how i form my assessment of you. mean to the waitress? then you're a fucking asshole who thinks he's better-than. white in the front, black in the back--like h8 was saying above? spineless. don't waste my mother-fucking time. smoothing takes a lot of time, dreamer. you still dream. me too.
Re: Easter Egg Soup by kthay	28-Aug-03/5:48 PM
you are a very silly poet. i like this innocent rhymimg of yours.
Re: Invisible Poo by kthay	28-Aug-03/5:46 PM
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