on affirmative action by thelonefrobros
16 Jul 2002, 3:38 PM
this is badly impressive!
on Alone by shwenatjadeflower
23 Jul 2002, 12:59 PM
The thought is so sincere and the description is so sensual expressed in sweet simple words with perfect control of rhythm and rhyme.. I almost feel your feeling.
on The First Proper Evening of Summer by [mojo]
23 Jul 2002, 1:54 PM
and resonant sounds- sounds dissonant. The rest is fine.
on Navel Action by BadPoet
22 Jul 2002, 2:32 PM
The challenge for poetry is to create art from apparently non-poetic themes. This poem meets this challenge fantastically.
on Small and Simple by venusdemilo
22 Jul 2002, 4:56 PM
If we could understand misunderstanding there would be no act of misunderstanding in the first place. A pointless argument.
on One Morning by Joyleaf
21 Jul 2002, 10:41 AM
Beautiful description capturing the delicacy of emotion and the
wonder of the moment. Well-done.
(grey not gray}
wonder of the moment. Well-done.
(grey not gray}
on Whisper Under the Thunder by OneFingerAnswer
21 Jul 2002, 11:40 AM
Good start. Then becomes repetitive, verbose and stale. I think syanzas 1,5,9 and 11 are enough.
on some deleted poem
22 Jul 2002, 1:36 PM
Perfect consonance of rhythm and rhyme, imagery and thought, form and content to create a perfet poem with classic echoes of Fitzgerald's Khayam.
on Suffocating by mytenderrage
22 Jul 2002, 1:46 PM
I read all your poems. Genuine feelings expressed clearly and simply. Why all this pessimism, desperation and pain and you are only 18? Look at the brighter side of life and its beautiful possibilities.
on i dreamt i spoke by roses are read
22 Jul 2002, 9:22 AM
This poem has more potential which you could explore. Words are usually heard? So why are no ears cut off?!
on Billie's Threnody by Frass
20 Jul 2002, 8:13 AM
good spin.
on He loves me by susie
19 Jul 2002, 11:13 AM
Nice calculation.
Leaf not leave [but leaves]
Better to let the sun tells you the good news:
The sun starts shining and whispers to me: He loves you!
Leaf not leave [but leaves]
Better to let the sun tells you the good news:
The sun starts shining and whispers to me: He loves you!
on some deleted poem
19 Jul 2002, 11:24 AM
Not man, girl and only sixteen. OK an old/eternal theme but in new short sharp impressive expression.
on some deleted poem
19 Jul 2002, 11:30 AM
Simple, sincere, warmly-expressed emotions in a perfect poetic form.
on some deleted poem
18 Jul 2002, 3:55 PM
Interesting idea but could be written a simple prosaic sentence which it is.
on This Strange Feeling by snowing
16 Jul 2002, 2:35 PM
funny, fairy and bunny do not fit with the conclusion of the poem.