Re: a comment on Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57	7-Nov-04/1:53 AM
-Zodiac either you are completely misunderstanding me or I am not making myself clear. I was in no way being defensive to your remarks about my poem. If anything I was trying to take your very abrasive response to my first comment and lighten it. What I meant by I still don't care, is that I understand that I have grammatical errors in my poetry but the way you have attacked me for them in the past has made me less want to improve and more want to ignore you. Not for your criticism which was justified, but for your character. However, that is in the past now. I was bringing back or old argument about grammar in poetry when I said I still don't care. Just to refresh your memory I had said that I felt a certain freedom with poetry where I don't have to be confined to the technical rules of the English language. You of course heavily disagreed and that was our little argument. Of course I will take your criticism into consideration...I in NO way feel that my poetry is above being criticized. I do believe that your strange misinterpretations of my comments however, are where the problem lies. I never made any hints to your wife being a "a sick Islam-baiting skankwhore. Where you picked that up from I don't have any idea. In my replies to you I was not defending myself in anyway I was trying to turn the mood from your angry, defensive, and blatantly hurt response to a more peaceful one. I was not being sarcastic if that is what you thought. I never had intentions of fighting with you zodiac. Or speaking badly of Islamic Women. Once again you have been oversensitive and did not understand the tone of my responses to you. I am sorry you felt I was defending myself or attacking you. I was doing neither. So will you accept this and may we move on.....Or shall we be destined to run around in circles until we both run into walls?
Re: a comment on Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57	6-Nov-04/10:41 AM
Don't say comeback, comeback sounds pugnacious. I was simply replying to your story with an added tid-bit of my own don't be so irritable my dear. P.S I still don't care PPS.I would expect nothing less from you.
Re: a comment on Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57	6-Nov-04/5:09 AM
no more weird I suppose then your wife staring back, right my wise friend?
Re: a comment on Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57	5-Nov-04/7:26 AM
I do I do
Re: Hmm... by tre	20-May-04/11:22 AM
I get it...and I love it
Re: Suicide Girl by wilco	18-Apr-04/11:11 PM
I would give you a ten for this line alone... I’ll be your Elliot Smith If you’ll be my Sylvia Plath But then you go on to write several more stand out lines...I loved it!
Re: Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	14-Apr-04/10:35 PM
Ah Foucalt...lovely...I do believe Dear I hold your words dear- Dear
Re: Rough draft of a poetry manifesto by zodiac	12-Apr-04/8:14 AM
The title I like...not blown away by the poem
Re: lost memories by ggawrysi	11-Apr-04/10:41 PM
I love you...this poem is beautiful
Re: My Day Off by wilco	11-Apr-04/8:20 PM
I love it...sounds like a Streets song...I could read it a hundred times...also mad props on the Zodiac line I'm glad someone had the balls to stand up to him!
Re: One voice by tre	10-Apr-04/11:55 PM
Even though this poem is light and doesn't pull at ones emotions like your previous posts...I think stylisticly you nailed it...it flows really well and comes together perfectly well done tre!!!
Re: Cabbagetown will miss you by tre	8-Apr-04/12:04 AM
There are so many great things happening in this poem...some really great line I LOVE the last stanza...still I think it can be cleaned up the images can be made sharper...cut out some of the narrative parts make us feel Cabbagetown not just hear about it. Also capitalize three to make it clear it is his name. An example of possibly a way to edit it: Parties with dogs who roam streets chase cats speak to eachother All NIGHT They too were at your birthday party everyone was there but you not you THree you were in the hospital there were no dogs there your accident struck you down before your cancer could Lifes a Bitch Three but you already knew that People whisper its better this way My mom says it too I still don't understand I wish I had known you better I don't know if that is cleaner but something along those lines would make this incredibly powerful poem even more powerful Keep with this poem It will be GREAT
Re: A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom	7-Apr-04/5:50 PM
Hell yes
Re: The most trite garbage ever(in other words my love life) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	7-Apr-04/5:44 PM
I wasn't sure if I liked this poem very much until I saw that it was a pimple...So in that case it fits perfectly well done
Re: You Crossed My Mind by gregg333	7-Apr-04/5:37 PM
I like the way it sounds..."you rolled by like a slow freight train" I like the tone and feeling of the poem. Its a bit simple for though the poem its self is a deep metaphor..I almost wish it was longer but I still think its great!!
Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	6-Apr-04/10:37 PM
Been there!! I think this could be a great poem if you revise it a bit...make the ideas crisper and the images jump out more...but you nailed the emotion felt it coming out of the page...9
Re: Almost One by thepinkbunnyofdoom	6-Apr-04/10:32 PM
I had to read this poem a few times to get a good feel for it...but I like it despite it being a bit convoluted in certain parts.
Re: dc by jsd	6-Apr-04/10:19 PM
I love the flow of this poem my favorite lines...autumn always made me feel alone, and so this is fall in a yuppie town...I can see where it can get a bit weighed down by being to wordy however, the entire poem has a solid tone and mood to it. I very much enjoyed it!!
Re: july by jsd	4-Apr-04/9:26 PM
My favorite of your poems...I love the last stanza and the last line really sticks with you...you rock chica
Re: The Trees by anitawit	30-Mar-04/11:58 AM
I like the idea of gnarled trees this is an interesting poem...I think I would like it better if there was more to it more interesting verse's like this one