Re: a comment on Axe Murderer by Blindproject217	19-Apr-03/4:33 PM
Look guys...im a self taught wannabe poet, ive had zero instruction, but im searching, looking for anyone to help me, i love writing and im want to be the best at what i do. sadly i am far from that, if anyone can give me some pointers on how to do this correctly i would be forever in their debt. right now im searching the internet on how to write this stuff, im asking any and every language major what they know, and im showing this to anyone who has an opinion. I need some guidance.
Re: if tommorow never comes by junkyarddog13	14-Apr-03/9:50 PM
Good stuff, -9-
Re: Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom	14-Apr-03/8:59 PM
Nice visuals, try and find some more words for screaming though. The only other line i dont like is the "spontaneous combustion" one. It just doesnt fit. Other than that its pretty good, redo it and redo it, to get rid of some excess words that bog down the story, have a -7-
Re: Porno by Bobjim_returns	9-Apr-03/10:05 PM
Ya know, some people might actually try that link, I pray for their souls, I mean come on, DA and P&K. I know their...a package and all, but goodness, Why they have to show it to the world is beyond me. That kinda stuff will turn a gay man straight, or a straight man blind.
Re: ManEater by dmzoacan	9-Apr-03/9:56 PM
A little to repetitive, -3-
Re: a comment on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub	9-Apr-03/9:49 PM
Bill, I dont know why you let him get to you, He's an idiot.
Re: and i don't even care by nolan	7-Apr-03/10:27 PM
Try last line like this, "As you are killing me, slowly killing my fire." it has a nicer ring to it. -5-
Re: The second coming by cleverdevice	3-Apr-03/5:11 PM
p.s. I love the last line.
Re: The second coming by cleverdevice	3-Apr-03/5:11 PM
-9-
Re: a comment on Bible Quoting Fag Killer (So it is said) by Blindproject217	3-Apr-03/4:46 PM
Thanks ranger, I will. And I think I might just write a poem about that.
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- by waltfreakinwhitman	2-Apr-03/9:14 PM
A masterpiece, keep trashin people in hilarious ways, -10-
Re: Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman	2-Apr-03/9:09 PM
Not so much the tugging or the white fury, but every morning without fail I have to do the bend and tuck. It fights back but I can tame it after awhile.Its worse when it salutes in your sleep and you role over, talk about a rude awakening. I give it a -0- for retarded truthfulness, I want this to be dominating the worst list. Way to go! p.s. great user name.
Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	2-Apr-03/8:59 PM
Your an idiot, and what the hell is up with all the "good day to you sir" "would you care for tea" "jolly good ol boy" ta ta tiddily freekin tiddily ta? But sadly, I like your poem, not becuase (like common misconception) its funny or crude but becuase i can see somthing deeper behind it. Jolly good and good day to you my boy, ta ta (I would give it a good vote but seeing that you hold the most poems on the worst list Ill help you keep it that way)-0-
Re: Lossing Grip by Katie2	2-Apr-03/8:37 PM
Jeez all this suicide stuff gets me depressed. I really like the first verse though, cadacus is right, The chorus is a little long. I have that problem sometimes when Im writing songs as well, mine are either too long or too short, I havent mastered the middle ground. I would suggest asking someone you know you likes writing songs to help you, that always helps with alot of my weak points. But overall pretty good. -7-
Re: a comment on Bible Quoting Fag Killer (So it is said) by Blindproject217	2-Apr-03/8:00 PM
DA, I know where your coming from, thanks for the advice, but I cant. Maybe Im brainwashed like p&k said. But I cant be wrong, realizing that your whole life has been a lie, do know how mind-blowing that concept is. Waking up and coming to grips with the fact that every thing that you to be right and wrong is all grey? Look, I know it sounds foolish but I still believe it, its not something I can explain. Its just a gut feeling. And so far it hasnt let me down. Thanks for the advice though.
Re: a comment on Bible Quoting Fag Killer (So it is said) by Blindproject217	2-Apr-03/10:32 AM
Im not condoning hate, Im angry and I get lost in it. As soon as that happens the world convicts me "You call your self a Christian?" NO I call myself human. Im trying to follow my beliefs but its not easy (nothing is). You think that I actually like trying to be righteous, sometimes I dont even want to try, I want to go and do everything Ive been brought up to know is wrong. I wanna go kill every person who makes fun of my convictions, I want to curse out every guy who pushes me around, I want to not worry about sin and forgiveness and all the other Bible crap. But I look at the bigger picture, I see Loneliness and suicide, I dont want to live an empty life, I want to feel meaning and purpose. Something Ive never had until now..Look, I could argue all day until im blue in the face, but Im tired of it. Im tired of trying to prove myself all the time. Im not even going to retaliate anymore, there is 1 of me and a 100 of you. Ill just post my crap and pray for all you. I done want anymore enemies, Ive got enough at my school and my nieghborhood. Ya know why? Cause I wont smoke pot or steal, And you say that am intolerant? You say im a crusader, you call me a fag killer? Ive never hurt or hated anyone for disagreeing with me, I don’t hate homosexuals, I don’t hate people who disagree with me. I just tell people what I think because I don’t want to see them in hell.
Re: Attention! - To the Wondering Soul by darkhelmet10	1-Apr-03/7:41 PM
Just because I know right from wrong doesn’t mean I’m 12, you seem to think that religion is beneath you. That you are sufficient by yourself, you are your own God. Do you ever wonder if you’re wrong? Does your agnostic Christian hating soul ever long for more than this empty reality? IF you can tell me the point of life and why its worth living then Ill change my mind, but so far the trials and all the crap isn’t worth living for. You go to school to get useless knowledge and then get married to a pretty face, 9-5 until your 50 then kick back and enjoy emptiness. I don’t want that, and the only thing keeping my moving is the fact that one day ill be somewhere better. I can’t prove it, but it sounds a hell of alot better than the alternative.
Re: a comment on 2 Haiku by Blindproject217	1-Apr-03/3:26 PM
Thanx
Re: a comment on Attention! - To the Wondering Soul by darkhelmet10	1-Apr-03/2:13 PM
1. While God did not physically pick up a pen and write the bible it is said by God himself that he inspired it through his disciples. Jesus(who is the same person as God) said "these are my words" meaning the bible. And that whole five scholars theory is flawed, because those five all have different views and separate ideas of God or the world. The disciples who wrote Gods word were all on a common ground, they believed in God and gave up their lives to tell the masses about him. As a side note, if you believe that God is all knowing and is capable of everything than what makes you think that he would let something in the Bible that he did not condone. 2. God told Moses to go and destroy cities that were unholy, he even commanded Moses to kill the women and children because they themselves were also wicked. The children were rebellious, the women were impure and prostitutes, God even told him to kill the livestock. When I read this I was shocked, I could not understand why a loving God would kill innocent children. Well the point is they were not innocent, they were wicked and God knew when they grew up they would try and avenge their fathers by killing the Jews. God even said if you can find even one righteous person I will spare the city, and Moses could not. You say God does not advocate war?! We, America, are not even that harsh. We are trying with all our power to make sure that innocent civilians are not harmed, many of our own men have died trying to help Iraq’s citizens. And yes I do call my self a Christian, I am a fighter of evil(something people do not believe in anymore), I do not strive for war, but I know it is necessary. You believe that we should not have avenged out innocent civilians on 9-11? What would you do if I killed your family? would you press charges? Or would you just let it go? If I decided that I wanted to kill you, would you try and prevent it? or just wait for it to happen. You don’t want us to attack Iraq because nothing has happened to you, I guarantee if it was someone you loved in those buildings that died you would be fronting this war with everything inside you. Nothing has touched your little world, your inside your house, something alot of people do not have. You can protest laws you dissagree with, somthing most people can not do. And most of all, you are free. Free to live the way you want. That is a privilege every human being should have. If you were living under tyranny would you want what we have? Our president doesn’t spray chemical weapons on our towns, and watch as hundreds of women and children slowly and painfully die. Our government is here to protect us, and we, with the power and wealth that we have, owe it to the rest of the world, if willing, to free them.
Re: a comment on My task by Blindproject217	31-Mar-03/1:51 PM
Never bashed a fag, Only tough when needed, Truth in a world void of absolutes, Always.