| Re: A Guilty Bride's Demise by eldorado |
13-Jul-02/1:31 AM |
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Beautiful images and a flowing build-up of tension. Question: Was the desirous mistress desiring the groom or the bride?
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| Re: The Set Back by horus8 |
13-Jul-02/3:17 PM |
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Enjoyed the first 2 verses, ie. every line was evocative of the feeling you are portraying, could have been applied to any toxic relationship. Then the narrowing down of context and the final release of pain. It takes a lot of guts to do this. I found your poem poignant and well presented.
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| Re: The Set Back by horus8 |
13-Jul-02/3:19 PM |
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13-Jul-02/3:30 PM |
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If you want an answer to your last question, walk to the shops in your bare feet. People do, you know. I enjoyed your poem up till the last word.
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| Re: Night on the Towne by Modulo |
13-Jul-02/3:34 PM |
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| Re: Saturation Point by malakin |
13-Jul-02/3:41 PM |
Really enjoyed your poem, Malakin. I love many of your lines like, 'You wouldn't walk before because
You were trapped in your tuxedo T-shirt and suspenders sitting in solitary confinement' and 'There's more to life than pondering posies
But not so much you should trample them'. A great reflection on pomp and vanity.
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| Re: persistant doubt by sapphire_rain7 |
13-Jul-02/4:06 PM |
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You have captured loneliness and betrayal as it is in its moment of manifestation. The question in your last line leaves an opening for hope. Don't let the sadness stay with you much longer. Its time to find joy in your life again with someone new.
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| Re: I like to run by T.Becquerel II |
13-Jul-02/4:13 PM |
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lol! Let me guess. MY...FALLING? LEGS.
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| Re: remembering you by sapphire_rain7 |
13-Jul-02/4:19 PM |
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You capture love in all its complexity so well.
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13-Jul-02/4:25 PM |
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Welcome Miss. I think you should tell him.
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| Re: Whisper Under the Thunder by OneFingerAnswer |
22-Jul-02/5:15 AM |
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I think the repetition of your 'whisper under the thunder' stanza added to the mood of this poem always bringing it back to the main point. I think it worked in this particular poem. Also I liked the concluding stanza and if you knew this person I too hope she stays that tough and finds happiness.
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| Re: Pride by Art Glocken |
29-Jul-02/6:18 AM |
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I like this. So typically human.
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| Re: How Dare You Knock? by unknown |
29-Jul-02/6:31 AM |
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Sometimes you read a poem and you can't say exactly why you like it you just know that the poet has just shared something real with you and thats how I feel about this poem.
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| Re: kauri by itchiwitch |
13-Aug-02/3:53 AM |
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Don't sweat it! Its a tree!
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| Re: What to do, what to do! by itchiwitch |
29-Aug-02/6:22 PM |
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FUCK YOU TOO ARSEHOLE. HA HA HA
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