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Free verse № 3975

The Set Back

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Jul 2002 · Edited 28 Jul 2003 · 8 comments

I don't want to look at you anymore Your face reminds me of too much hatred Forces me to listen to the screaming of the past The slamming doors of the present The polished coffins of the future So I'd prefer not to gaze upon you again. I cannot listen to your double negatives anymore Your voice has the texture of a thousand prisoners Fighting and killing in the rapture of fear and childhood confusion The lack of compassion The failure to admit guilt The return to the womb of abandonment Therefore, silence has become my modicum So, keep your demented comments to yourself. Why make a child, just because your cock throbs When your nipples get hard is that proof that you deserve a child The children grown of lust have gathered at the gallows Moreover, I too, am there With my big silver whistle Poised to organize this chaos Using sharp piercing cries. "Line them up, (I say) I want to get a better look at this sick collection of fuck-ups. These political parasites These foster parent cocaine smokers These greedy defilers of all that's humane The cream of the system Hand salute Now break all of their necks on the count of three. Who's with me!". My mother was instantly at my toes My father sat saddled upon her back All of our ancestors were chain ganged behind them with sharpened scythes drooping. She said, "If you kill us now you will also cease to exist". I smiled my worries bright like an obese advertisement on the side of the free-way, and motioned for a continuance. "We are all here today to witness The release of self pity The burial of doubt, and the cremation of the reactive mind I would like everyone to return to his or her homes, and ritualistically remove and discard any shoe boxed letters or picture that has captured the past within its contents, and put a match to them, amen.". "Long live the future and may we have the opportunity to share her bed for eternity. Never growing old and always possessing the option of thumb sucking and hermitage if need be, Hallelujah.". Get over it, then get over you.

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8 comments

[6] shwenatjadeflower 12-Jul-02/12:51 AM Reply
i like the way it is put together, and the terms used.
[10] itchiwitch 13-Jul-02/3:17 PM Reply
Enjoyed the first 2 verses, ie. every line was evocative of the feeling you are portraying, could have been applied to any toxic relationship. Then the narrowing down of context and the final release of pain. It takes a lot of guts to do this. I found your poem poignant and well presented.
[10] itchiwitch 13-Jul-02/3:19 PM Reply
Excellently presented
[8] ==Doylum 4-Aug-02/2:36 PM Reply
why do i keep being presented with an poem entitled The Set Back. Where ever i turn i am asked to vote: please vote upon these words. Scart line in line line out 50Hz 240V 50W Achtung! entfernen Sie nicht Abdeckung
[n/a] horus8 4-Aug-02/3:02 PM Reply
doust thou want me to release the wagehals, hote isht der taug mein froint. your geifern smells of bauberin influence. aRE YOU A TREULOS wretch. do you like your shiezer packed by a professional schneideldorf. geikeln frettchen. lover.fillament. mackeral.ferns.reaper.i
[2] poetandknowit 15-Oct-02/7:30 PM Reply
Once this poem gets going I do not mind it so much. It is just the first part reminds me of loneshadow (albeit much better) and I just couldn't get past that.
[10] SupremeDreamer 28-Jul-03/3:37 PM Reply
WAHOO! Heil HORUS! LEAD ME MY GENERAL! ONWARDS ONWARDS, TWARDS THE FUTURE.. i like the pictures though.. ;P 10.
[8] deleted user 1-Sep-03/11:26 AM Reply
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