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Night on the Towne (Haiku) by Modulo Softened haze, whispers.
Silver, Brass, tapped announcements.
Bright lights and Jazz Nights!
Up the ladder:
My Sun
Down the ladder:
My Torcher Chamber
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Posted: May 11, 2002 7:22 PM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2002 7:22 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.119203 Overall Rank: 13293 Comments:
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itchiwitch @ 203.97.2.243
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13-Jul-02/3:34 PM
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Mmmm. Nice!
Much better than your piece High? Coo. Uses plenty of lively language that reminds me of dodgy cocktail bars. I'm not sure about the exclamation mark and the capitalization of jazz nights at the end, bit too much exclamation for my likings, anyway good effort.
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