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How Dare You Knock? (Free verse) by antoniojl How dare you knock,
Like that,
While I'm trying to build this wall?
When I'm trying to bleed out mourn,
To wind myself back to quiet grief,
To think alone,
How dare you knock?
How dare you,
When I only want to sleep,
Appear here,
And relight fear while I heal?
When this hope-spark reignites the night-
How dare you knock again?
And how dare you,
When you know how I think,
And all your knocking brings
To this bleak window.
When all these elegies,
All this dirge can sing,
This requiem's sad whisperings,
And drowned optimism can bring,
Is more misery,
How dare you knock?
How dare you?
And now you've knocked;
How dare you leave?
Up the ladder:
Sweetness
Down the ladder:
Hands
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Posted: May 20, 2002 6:36 AM PDT; Last modified: May 20, 2002 6:36 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.304608 Overall Rank: 3653 Comments:
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nentwined @ 66.47.71.146
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10-Jul-02/4:12 PM
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I like the first three lines and the last two. I like the poem as those five lines. dunno. :)
Sometimes you read a poem and you can't say exactly why you like it you just know that the poet has just shared something real with you and thats how I feel about this poem.
that was sorta confuzzlin but it was ok, u werent nasty like some people, u werent like physco.. it was kewl.. good job.. keep tryin! :-P
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