on What to do, what to do! by itchiwitch
29 Aug 2002, 6:22 PM
FUCK YOU TOO ARSEHOLE. HA HA HA
on kauri by itchiwitch
13 Aug 2002, 3:53 AM
Don't sweat it! Its a tree!
on How Dare You Knock? by unknown
29 Jul 2002, 6:31 AM
Sometimes you read a poem and you can't say exactly why you like it you just know that the poet has just shared something real with you and thats how I feel about this poem.
on Pride by Art Glocken
29 Jul 2002, 6:18 AM
I like this. So typically human.
on Whisper Under the Thunder by OneFingerAnswer
22 Jul 2002, 5:15 AM
I think the repetition of your 'whisper under the thunder' stanza added to the mood of this poem always bringing it back to the main point. I think it worked in this particular poem. Also I liked the concluding stanza and if you knew this person I too hope she stays that tough and finds happiness.
on remembering you by sapphire_rain7
13 Jul 2002, 4:19 PM
You capture love in all its complexity so well.
on I like to run by T.Becquerel II
13 Jul 2002, 4:13 PM
lol! Let me guess. MY...FALLING? LEGS.
on persistant doubt by sapphire_rain7
13 Jul 2002, 4:06 PM
You have captured loneliness and betrayal as it is in its moment of manifestation. The question in your last line leaves an opening for hope. Don't let the sadness stay with you much longer. Its time to find joy in your life again with someone new.
on Saturation Point by malakin
13 Jul 2002, 3:41 PM
Really enjoyed your poem, Malakin. I love many of your lines like, 'You wouldn't walk before because
You were trapped in your tuxedo T-shirt and suspenders sitting in solitary confinement' and 'There's more to life than pondering posies
But not so much you should trample them'. A great reflection on pomp and vanity.
You were trapped in your tuxedo T-shirt and suspenders sitting in solitary confinement' and 'There's more to life than pondering posies
But not so much you should trample them'. A great reflection on pomp and vanity.
on Night on the Towne by Modulo
13 Jul 2002, 3:34 PM
Mmmm. Nice!
on The Set Back by horus8
13 Jul 2002, 3:19 PM
Excellently presented
on The Set Back by horus8
13 Jul 2002, 3:17 PM
Enjoyed the first 2 verses, ie. every line was evocative of the feeling you are portraying, could have been applied to any toxic relationship. Then the narrowing down of context and the final release of pain. It takes a lot of guts to do this. I found your poem poignant and well presented.
on A Guilty Bride's Demise by eldorado
13 Jul 2002, 1:31 AM
Beautiful images and a flowing build-up of tension. Question: Was the desirous mistress desiring the groom or the bride?