Re: THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand	23-Feb-03/9:38 AM
I say this is Hot Diggity Dog, Bravo I say, Yes Bravo indeed
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	24-Feb-03/12:41 PM
Line 3 constricts the message, but ding dong well done on a fine piece my lord heres your mark ```9
Re: Paths by LeBlank II	10-Mar-03/3:50 PM
Spiffing, but the last lines disenchanted the poem, you had made your point, and made it jolly well.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Apr-03/10:02 AM
Jolly good fun indeed. One could believe he actually wrote this. Be careful not to forget to come out of character.
Re: Wanna Be Porn Star. by spank me baby yeah	1-Apr-03/10:03 AM
Oh dear.
Re: Offence by Stephen Robins	1-Apr-03/10:06 AM
Oh my giddy Aunt Blythe, your certifiable.
Re: Worst Haiku Ever by maffy	1-Apr-03/10:07 AM
Let us pray that you get what you want. Do you write of anything remotely interesting?
Re: Worst Haiku Ever by maffy	1-Apr-03/10:07 AM
Interestingly enough you almost have the formula right.
Re: fever by <~>	1-Apr-03/10:11 AM
As I recall Elvis did sing 'Fever' with the Eden Perry band but thats another nut to polish. My dear spring truly is in the air, its in my step too after reading this. If you require my aid to spring you please call me on 0898-659-137698 : ask for Laurence.
Re: The Adulterous by Caducus	1-Apr-03/10:26 AM
I think the last line is wonderful. They are not easy these darned Haiku's. I see there is still no love lost between you and poetanknowit.
Re: Unemployed by OneFingerAnswer	1-Apr-03/10:27 AM
Too much 'He'
Re: Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig	8-Apr-03/1:24 PM
Thank you all for your constructive comments. I wrote this as a young fry and PAKI thank you for your time in studying this. It was written more like a sonnet and a testament to naivity in love. God Speed. Dark Angel, did you ever watch crazylegs crane? (it was on after the pink panther cartoon?
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Apr-03/1:25 PM
Thank you for this mam, wonderful.
Re: the photobooth by Bill Z Bub	9-Apr-03/5:19 AM
Mellifluently told ! Remember when taking on board the sound advice and suggestions given be careful not to disrupt the poignanancy you have masterfully created in here. perfection is a bridge too far, but by golly its in sight. Well done my boy on a bloody fine poem 10
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Apr-03/5:52 AM
Were you wearing oven gloves? and was the soap close at hand?
Re: MOM by INTRANSIT	12-Apr-03/1:22 PM
My Dear Rich, I have pasted 3 stanzas of interest to me where I think the poems strength lays. I need to know inherently more about the relationship. This reads like a showpiece of writing more than the emotionally charged insight I want. I dont want to come across like Lecter intimidating Clarisse, but fine writing and sentiment is the hardest thing to combine for personal satisfaction and reader satisfaction, its the marrying of the 2 I want you to do with this. The next moment you feel these emotions I want you to relinquish the laws of poetry and write one from the heart, read it aloud (I bet you do that dont you) and be honest with yourself about it affect it has on you. Poetry must (I believe) release the writer from the subject he is writing about. If one is honest about my work I would say there are much better traditionalist writer than me around true to the laws of poetry, I always feel a connection with your work - empathy, your uniqueness is empathy and clarity. I just want you to write this honestly, it shut me out, the language is wonderful in places just tell me about the inherent love and relationship, the conclusion, the beauty the madness the essance of you and your mother, this is your story, your testanment and immortalization of your dear Mother. There are only a few writers I will trust with my e-mail address I will give it to you shortly, if you ever need anything my dear boy you are most welcome Pain liquified, coursing through your body. The secondary killer.First time crashed second time failed Suggestions unheeded. Love neverending, love pushed aside. A deeper bond is born Love neverending, love pushed aside. A deeper bond is born Persona left behind, thoughts carried with. I can feel you inspiring me. These are the stanzas I love. Oh God I feel drunk as a Somersetian wasp.
Re: For Kristen by thepinkbunnyofdoom	12-Apr-03/1:32 PM
Vilanelles would have to be French there so bloody complicated in my opinion. I am inexperienced with this genre of writing but know the basic laws to them. The subject matter is too teen angst but this may make a good lyric. I would have liked to have seen 'broken hearts DONT mend, it would have obliterated the obvious cliche. However my darling don't despair all this needs is a few drafts and touches of creative glitter and originality and you'll have it sparkling like the star you are. Thank you so very much for your time in commenting on my work, I love you all the same on this site, it has been my pleasure meeting you. Goodbye. 6
Re: Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins	12-Apr-03/1:35 PM
Frightfully apt, reminds me of Horus8 poem on the Ebola virus. Good chap for keeping it short but effective, unpretentious and attention grabbing 7
Re: All the things i hate by Mutant_X	12-Apr-03/1:39 PM
My dear chap lose this, its just not dandy. i hate it that every time i need you,you are not there only you can make it right but it's only who always starts the fight i hate the way i love you and that to myself i can't even be true Try this as a lyric, make it effective, show your vitriol and keep us all engaged. Hope you dont mind but I will vote later when you maybe have edited it. Cheerio for now.