Re: Eros, and Psycho by horus8	25-Feb-03/12:32 PM
Now thats more like it, at last all I've seen is sex sex sex and frankly I am sick of it. Thank you for this its so pleasing to see one is hungry for knowledge other than pantomime pornography. Now my dear boy, there is something else please help me. I promised Quarton who has just posted a poem about space, that you may be able to help him with stanza 2, he may think me a darn fool but I loved stanza one but he needs to do something to stanza 2 its simply a beef wellington short of the sage, Please see what you can do I have offered some sound advice to the gentleman but theres a bloody fox trying to get at my chickens, so I must go and sound the pipe horn. Thanks awfully my boy. oh how rude heres a double ..10
Re: Where Time and Space End by Quarton	25-Feb-03/12:22 PM
Righty Ho then bombs away ! I was frustrated at the finale of this piece as there is so much fun one could have with this. Their are a multitude of metaphors you could utilize representing 'her' in the last line, # 1) who is she lets give her a name, if oyu look hard enough you will find in latin or the omega plenty of demi-gods representing the universe. Something as infinite as this subject requires infinite literature. Also what is this distant planet, do tell us more. wher eis it? describe its solar rings, write as if you are watching the majesty of the deep dark universe and take us there my boy. Now on the positvive sides what a wonderful opening 4 lines, alas from there you may have got a bit lazy. Now I do hope you modify this poem because I think it would make a bloody nice change from sex, that seems to dominate and pollute the beauty we are here for. Oh there i go again oh dear, I get lost sometimes in the passion of the piece. Now I must go and water my geraniums so i bid you good day sire. --6 and please do think of what I have said. I will ask around on my travels for people to read this, infact I'll ask Mr Horus.
Re: Where Time and Space End by Quarton	25-Feb-03/12:12 PM
Oh my dear boy I seem to be lost, I clicked on the wrong poem, but will read this as a courtesy, Back in a jiffy.
Re: We by Nanshe	25-Feb-03/4:01 AM
The miles mean nothing and everything, try 2/3/4 different attempts at this I do like the idea but its not quite conveyed satifactory enough. But do try --6
Re: a comment on The Blooding by Mr Pig	24-Feb-03/1:53 AM
You have made my day dear. I am in awe of your work and a positive endorsement from you is sacrisant. Your comment made me cry
Re: a comment on A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)	23-Feb-03/5:15 AM
Why thank you for such an adult comment. Anna Nicole Smith is white trash sir, you are not, I would guess you are a feast of good company and humour with a heart that outsizes its cage, sometimes things in life surpass a point of no return, despair is the road of dead rabbits, close your eyes and walk my dear friend you are a good man, and if you are not already, you would make a great daddy
Re: Clown of Misery by nocturnalism	23-Feb-03/5:03 AM
Yes, Yes one can see a story unfolding here, Artificial smiles, so true this day and age. 6
Re: His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger	23-Feb-03/5:00 AM
I see your an amiable laddie, who kindly offers his comments would you oblige me sometime and grease my whip, onw would appreciate your input on mine
Re: His Dying Words (2nd draft) by Ranger	23-Feb-03/4:59 AM
A good effort my young sire, however heartblink is a failed image it doesn't really work so amend it and consult me once you have finished. May I offer you respectability in a 7, quite moving.
Re: Pinjur by Shardik	21-Feb-03/9:26 AM
is pinjur also a spice?
Re: Pinjur by Shardik	21-Feb-03/9:26 AM
I wish to comment on this and fear the ramnifications for you as some think you as I and that is not the case. However I dont usually curse but fuck them ! This is a great piece of work, keep your chin up and your pen on paper, you grace it my good sir...8
Re: a comment on Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig	21-Feb-03/8:23 AM
God made it rain for 40 days and 40 nights in the old testament, his wrath for human selfishness, line 2 was merely a stylised reference to that, and line 3 was changed to feature Judas who represents the worst of humanity. It was a practise of literature NJ, and the reason if anyone is intersted why the dedication to GW, its due to her 'Confederate grey' line in one of her poems, I think stigmata skies is at least imaginative if nothing elso (inspired by the wonderful GW)
Re: a comment on Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig	21-Feb-03/2:31 AM
ok my cotton cloud, here is my 2nd dedication 1st Zzinnia now you my love
Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig	21-Feb-03/12:56 AM
I have taken your advice my dear girl and am delighted with the outcome, also a thank you to shardik, well done my friends, thanks
Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig	21-Feb-03/12:55 AM
Sidnt you hear the story of the 2 romans who laughed as the 3rd prayed forgiveness? its myth but I liked that story. Yes I have peter gabriels music too for the last temptation of christ and one recommends it is so beautiful and the film is in my top 3 of all faves, willem defoe deserved an oscar.
Re: a comment on Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	19-Feb-03/5:16 AM
I used to have some pigs and they died in the foot and mouth epidemic and had to be slaughtered. I left for Gloucester that day because one couldn't bear the sight of Rosie, Sharky, Monsieur, and Goatthroat being terminated. Pigs are beautiful creatures and contrary to the book of koran ARE clean specimens. I have heard the sound of a pig mating and it reminded me of a young winsome strumpet I made love to in a violet field south of cirencester. My name is Horatio Piggott, Mr Pig to my poemrankers. God Speed my friend !
Re: a comment on The Blooding by Mr Pig	19-Feb-03/5:11 AM
Oh how awful the ubiquitous irony of mistaken identity. I would like to state to all at poemranker that Sir Shardik is NOT Mr Pig, as for the phone calls I suggest you contact the police. Please offer me your opinion on the poem my good fellow and oblige me with your views. Thank you, and good luck in this dill pickle of a sour note.
Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined	19-Feb-03/5:05 AM
I say Sir, one may say this is an intersting read but the profane manner in which our most personal anatomical parts are described is awful, please stop watching hotel porn, My offer is a 5 marks lost on degrading penis
Re: The Voice of the Night (dedicated to Mr. PIG) by Sylvia Bravo	18-Feb-03/4:22 AM
How charming my dear, thank you this is wonderful god bless you
Re: a comment on Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	18-Feb-03/12:46 AM
Thank you so much my darling Gods Wife, I knew something was not quite together and you are quite right. I am very pleased with this now please offer me one more perusal and comment.