| Re: Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X |
11-Apr-03/8:08 AM |
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A good try at the suicide genre but the repetition and use of cliches adds nothing to our imagination as its a tell all poem, however I bequeath thee a 6.
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| Re: No Easy Way To Be Free by Bonehiss |
10-Apr-03/10:02 AM |
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Stanza 3 is strong I do like it, however it just doesn't do enough to excite my literary erogenous zones. Try condensing these images, writing is a portrait of hard bristles and soft fingers, I see your angst and think you could do another draft, its not bad my darling
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
10-Apr-03/9:58 AM |
I must dash now Z to fix the leak in the summerhouse, I do hope you have your reply forthwith.
I look awfully tired as well maybe I need a hot martell and bed.
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| Re: War Begins on Tuesday by Nicholas Jones |
10-Apr-03/9:53 AM |
I have personally dusted down my bifocals to offer you a few curmudgeons on politicians, and Nicholas one hopes you enjoy them as much as I.
1) if President Bush has a straight penis, its the only part of his adminstration that is
2)They are nothing else but a load of kippers - 2 faced with no guts
3)Mothers want all their sons to become president but they dont want them to be politicians in the process.
For now my dear boy, farewell.
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
10-Apr-03/9:08 AM |
Z,
Please ordain me with both. This is about the effect my father had on me being able to get close, one fears one is a tad frigid when it comes to the physical aspects of our desire. When I close my eyes I see my father who never held me, I wish he had, apparently they do, some of them. He wasw not present whilst this one side tenderness occured.
Oh hickory dickory what have I done posting this, should I remove it, will people think I a freak Z?
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
10-Apr-03/8:04 AM |
I did delete your comment and yes I have many poems in the loft but I have to be honest about myself on a site where alter ego's mask ones selves.
As Samuel Butler once said: 'Man is the only animal that can remain on friendly terms with the victims he intends to eat....until he eats THEM.
Go back to channel 16 on your TV, i am quite okay thank you.
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| Re: The sky is falling by INTRANSIT |
8-Apr-03/9:30 AM |
I did find the picture of the American and British soldiers quite hilarious of them 'chilling' on may say in his palace smoking.
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| Re: Fraternity hazing the sheepdog by horus8 |
8-Apr-03/9:27 AM |
I hear the words on the streets to descibe this is LOL ?
Well I'm astonished I never understood the lingo, a hearty hoo haa indeed.
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| Re: a comment on The Blooding by Mr Pig |
31-Mar-03/8:40 AM |
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| Re: THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand |
31-Mar-03/8:38 AM |
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Goodness me what a winsome chart and an honour to be included. My fritters are touched !
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| Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig |
26-Mar-03/1:48 AM |
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One would guess Bobjim its in the top 10 for the same reason you are not. I see you have made sure it isn't anymore though. I apologize profusely that you disliked it, maybe your right, maybe your wrong, thats what I find so diggity dog about poetry, everyones opinion is so different.
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| Re: PIGS of the world by wLeBlanc IIIw |
21-Mar-03/2:31 AM |
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Dear Sir,PLEASE LEAVE THE PIGS OUT OF THIS,
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| Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig |
17-Mar-03/5:41 AM |
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Like your comment then Sir ?
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| Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig |
16-Mar-03/5:56 AM |
I think you misunderstand the concept of a haiku, thay are meant to be short. The point or purpose is there for you to see but you are missing the point so many others have comprehended.
1) Romans laughing ( as they did in the childrens bible at christs sufferance on the cross.
2) Wine saturates holy bread = wine is blood bread is body of christ, blood pours from christs wounds.
3) juas eats supper as christ is dying, that is the irony judas eats supper again after the last supper, the traitor consumes his saviour.
Patience is required when perusing a haiku, it is not in design meant to be an instant fix ofunderstanding, this has a meaning if you look for it.
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| Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig |
12-Mar-03/1:33 PM |
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My dear please accept my apologies for the delay in responding. Wine saturates holy bread is mataphoric for blood saturates Jesus flesh and Judas eats his supper on the night he died the day after he sat with Jesus when they shared supper, 2 paralells of good and ...well lets just say not so good.
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| Re: a comment on Crucifixion by Mr Pig |
11-Mar-03/2:04 AM |
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Oh how lovely a response from the Lord.
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| Re: a comment on Family Portrait by Mr Pig |
10-Mar-03/3:44 PM |
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I do believe my Father would not recognize my guts, he had none of his own.
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| Re: a comment on Family Portrait by Mr Pig |
10-Mar-03/3:43 PM |
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Hello Sir Intransit, so kind of you to endulge one with your comment. The Cuckoo is the nest stealing mistress of my Father, and may God wet his ashes this fine eve.
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| Re: a comment on Somme (A Horror Of War) by Mr Pig |
10-Mar-03/2:11 AM |
Good day to you Sir, My name is Humphrey one of Mr Pigs close aides. He has just returned from Hospital and has asked me to request your kindness in his delay in replying. I had printed your comments for him to peruse and he was rather disconsolate. He asked me to pass this on to you.
Dear Dolyum, It is with regret that I have not had time to respond to your query regarding my Haiku 'The Cheetah', please for the record send me your question and once I can reply without the influence of drugs one will be delighted to hopefully answer your questions adequately.
Your Comrade in ink: Mr Pig xx
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| Re: a comment on Somme (A Horror Of War) by Mr Pig |
9-Mar-03/2:43 PM |
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Why thank you, I have written another poem under my other user name : Mr Pig (again), I hope you like it.
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