| Re: Ode to a Sock by JakeBike |
28-Apr-03/1:51 PM |
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| Re: Released by INTRANSIT |
28-Apr-03/1:35 PM |
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I was perusing this on fine milled paper as do like to print the longer poems out and have a darn good gander at them. I was interested in the capitulaton of the piece and I think Mr Caducus made an interesting comment about perspective. It reads as a very adult piece, from the last 2 lines of S1 I felt empathy and solace in the fact we all share the hurt of a lost bond wish to to say thank you for writing this it left me feeling happy on my own with a half baked cuban and a glass of sour mash over ice: 9: Take care my kindred friend.
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| Re: a comment on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig |
28-Apr-03/1:21 PM |
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Eminence achieved in your comment
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| Re: a comment on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig |
28-Apr-03/1:20 PM |
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Thank you for your informative comment, charmed I'm sure.
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| Re: a comment on Death Of A Rose (New draft) by Mr Pig |
27-Apr-03/4:26 AM |
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I think this is 17 syl please clarify kind sir.
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| Re: Bombs by Shardik |
17-Apr-03/3:37 AM |
Shardik Sir, if you have time out of what one imagines a busy schedule please will you click in the comments section of my user name and see a comment I left on one of Nicholas Jones poems about politicians.
Sincerely
Laurence.
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| Re: Bombs by Shardik |
17-Apr-03/3:35 AM |
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Perfect my fellow. This says all it needs to say about war, powerful and conclusive my dear friend I am honoured to have read it. 10
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
12-Apr-03/1:47 AM |
Thank you so much for your comments I perused them with interest. I agree about s1 line 2, and the blasted spellcheck does not suffice with German Aviation.
The river waiting for a mudslide is suggesting that my purity is waiting for the filth that I associate with affection. Once the mudslide occurs I am in a sense purified, normal, at peace with giving myself emotionally and physically. As soon as these emotion emerge again I will take light of your constructive suggestions and re-edit. For now farewell all.
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
11-Apr-03/9:23 AM |
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What a lovely reply. Thank you Ma'm.
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| Re: The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
11-Apr-03/9:05 AM |
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Very Humourous, you are a witty man and a 10 would be the mark of a proper gentleman.
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| Re: a comment on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig |
11-Apr-03/8:59 AM |
Yes JH you are right of course it was not really required. For a moment I thought you were saying you loved me, oh well never mind. How are you anyway ? If I am ever in California near the napa valley it would be bloody wonderful to meet you and your effervescent sister.
Enjoy your weekends everyone, God Speed!
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| Re: Originality by shwenatjadeflower |
11-Apr-03/8:39 AM |
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I enjoyed the opening but detest Marx, he used to scare me as a boy.
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| Re: Dogwood Winter by Rex Karrs |
11-Apr-03/8:33 AM |
Its one of those to study I think.
I will try and come back one day soon but for now I must retire for my bath.
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| Re: To My Grave by Bonehiss |
11-Apr-03/8:31 AM |
Quite poignant, I liked the last Stza.
(Does not deserve a 4)
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| Re: Everything Counts by Lord Ganus |
11-Apr-03/8:27 AM |
Golly ! this was enjoyable and humourous because contracts are the epitomy of evil. In Eritrea one man had his hand severed for breach of a promise made to his son, his son severed his fathers hand with such ferocity it split the scabbard.
Bravo 8
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| Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT |
11-Apr-03/8:23 AM |
Dear Mr In-transit.
A formal request for you to please offer any thoughts on my recent posting.
Kind Regards
Laurence. aka Mr Pig
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| Re: You Left Me by Cali |
11-Apr-03/8:21 AM |
How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.
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| Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT |
11-Apr-03/8:19 AM |
I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem.
Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.
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| Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT |
11-Apr-03/8:17 AM |
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February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7
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| Re: You are not me by Mutant_X |
11-Apr-03/8:11 AM |
I see the tenderness of age in your work. As you become more life experienced your writing will evolve as it is with your work at present, the naivity somewhat burdens any serious writing.
We've all been there though so keep your pecker up. 5
I would be grateful if you would look at mine and offer me your views,
Thank you.
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