Oh sweet Columbus.

I was perusing this on fine milled paper as do like to print the longer poems out and have a darn good gander at them. I was interested in the capitulaton of the piece and I think Mr Caducus made an interesting comment about perspective. It reads as a very adult piece, from the last 2 lines of S1 I felt empathy and solace in the fact we all share the hurt of a lost bond wish to to say thank you for writing this it left me feeling happy on my own with a half baked cuban and a glass of sour mash over ice: 9: Take care my kindred friend.

Shardik Sir, if you have time out of what one imagines a busy schedule please will you click in the comments section of my user name and see a comment I left on one of Nicholas Jones poems about politicians.

Sincerely

Laurence.

Perfect my fellow. This says all it needs to say about war, powerful and conclusive my dear friend I am honoured to have read it. 10

Very Humourous, you are a witty man and a 10 would be the mark of a proper gentleman.

I enjoyed the opening but detest Marx, he used to scare me as a boy.

Its one of those to study I think.
I will try and come back one day soon but for now I must retire for my bath.

Quite poignant, I liked the last Stza.

(Does not deserve a 4)

Golly ! this was enjoyable and humourous because contracts are the epitomy of evil. In Eritrea one man had his hand severed for breach of a promise made to his son, his son severed his fathers hand with such ferocity it split the scabbard.

Bravo 8

Dear Mr In-transit.
A formal request for you to please offer any thoughts on my recent posting.

Kind Regards

Laurence. aka Mr Pig

How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.

I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem.

Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.

February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7

I see the tenderness of age in your work. As you become more life experienced your writing will evolve as it is with your work at present, the naivity somewhat burdens any serious writing.

We've all been there though so keep your pecker up. 5

I would be grateful if you would look at mine and offer me your views,

Thank you.