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Somme (A Horror Of War) (Haiku) by Mr Pig Human warrens,
Filled with immaculate limbs,
The letterboxes rattle.
Up the ladder:
Perversions 6: Judgement Day
Down the ladder:
Untitled
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.8333335
Posted: March 1, 2003 6:52 AM PST; Last modified: March 3, 2003 8:34 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.793812 Overall Rank: 1704 Comments:
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Garrett S Sexton @ 213.122.114.88
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1-Mar-03/1:01 PM
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This one doesnt work for me,even when i grasped it!
A POWERFUL STATEMENT INDEED. THE LAST LINE IS VERY SAD AND BUSH IS A TWAT.
No, Bush is the antichrist (yet totally unaware) Ashcroft is a twat.
Ah, at last. I was waiting for a new haiku. This is nearly excellent, you're one syllable over, possibly change immaculate to something shorter? I love the first line though. You have such a great ability to control images, I would love to see you do something longer than a haiku...these things are over too damn quickly & The Blooding was great.
Right, that's me done for today, Good Morrow and God Bless you every one.
Why thank you, I have written another poem under my other user name : Mr Pig (again), I hope you like it.
Dio has rocked for a long long time. Now it's time for him to pass the torch.
Hello Mr Pig
I also love you very much, and would like to add my praise and affection. However I wonder if it would be possible for you to answer my questions to you on your Cheetah poem (I'm ever so sorry that they are most inappropriatley phrased!!) Thank you very much Your ever loving and affectionate ==Doylum.
Or of course you could continue to ignore me in that mature supercilious manner of yours. Which, lets face it, is probably for the best. After all as that poet for all occasions once said:
Too Much Love Will Kill Ya!!!!! I'm just the pieces of the man I used to be Too many bitter tears are raining down on me I'm far away from home And I've been facing this alone For much too long Don't hate me for loving you!
By god yer reticence mocks me!
Good day to you Sir, My name is Humphrey one of Mr Pigs close aides. He has just returned from Hospital and has asked me to request your kindness in his delay in replying. I had printed your comments for him to peruse and he was rather disconsolate. He asked me to pass this on to you.
Dear Dolyum, It is with regret that I have not had time to respond to your query regarding my Haiku 'The Cheetah', please for the record send me your question and once I can reply without the influence of drugs one will be delighted to hopefully answer your questions adequately. Your Comrade in ink: Mr Pig xx
Hmmm.
By the way, my comments aren't all that rare. I only commnent on things I like, rather than slagging people off.
That's very mature of you, Nicholas.
But so much less fun. :p
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