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Somme (A Horror Of War)
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Haiku
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Mr Pig
Human warrens, Filled with immaculate limbs, The letterboxes rattle.
Ranger
9-Mar-03/12:45 PM
Ah, at last. I was waiting for a new haiku. This is nearly excellent, you're one syllable over, possibly change immaculate to something shorter? I love the first line though. You have such a great ability to control images, I would love to see you do something longer than a haiku...these things are over too damn quickly & The Blooding was great.
Right, that's me done for today, Good Morrow and God Bless you every one.
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