replying on where is thy sting? by <~>
10 Feb 2003, 2:32 PM
I don't like the cognitive path that the stanzas trace. It doesn't really scream "moment in time" does it? I can relate to it, however, since my insomnia has a lot to do with amphetamines. I'm not sure just how you'd cut it back, I'd give you the same advice I gave cadacus - get a very clear conception of what you want to say and how you want to say it and then execute it all in one go.
JESUS CHRIST GIRL I WAS JOKING. POETRY IS NOT MY MEDIUM, IT DOESN'T MATTER TO ME, NOBODY READS IT AND IT'S FAR TO EASY TO DO BADLY. THIS IS AN ONLINE DIVERSION.
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IT'S A BEE IN A CARROT PATCH LOL ASL
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1. I like the punctuation in this one. It isn't gimickey. 2. You're a far better poet than I am, and frankly I'm the last person in the world to critique painting. My paintings are both ceaselessly confusing subtly facetious. 3. I have no idea if you are fat or ugly, and since your web page has barely any content it is impossible to judge your design skills. 4. I like you and I always liked you but what I don't like is your smart mouth.
on Exsqueeze Me? Baking Powder? by Yardbird
10 Feb 2003, 1:43 PM
DUDE YOU NEED TO SPARK ONE UP AND/OR BUY SOME KYUSS RECORDS (Don't - kyuss suck. Qotsa is where it's at)
on where is thy sting? by <~>
10 Feb 2003, 1:42 PM
A bit wordy, pained etc. If this were all the case would you be writing so much?
replying on An Ode to minorties that use Paprika by Shardik
9 Feb 2003, 10:02 PM
It wasn't my french. Remember, it was plagiarized. I suppose I have poor choice in french, as if it mattered. By the way - I just finished a 8 hour 11x14 inch watercolor painting of plaid. Does that make me gay or what's the deal. It's pretty goddamned depressing. A marvelous work of desolative proportions (and by that I mean ohmygod I gotta piss so bad)
on Magick Fingers of Love by Wulf
9 Feb 2003, 9:57 PM
Wow you wrote all of this this year jesus fuck what are you the fucking Isaac Newton of poetry. Not bad. 8.
replying on An Ode to minorties that use Paprika by Shardik
9 Feb 2003, 9:20 PM
I told him that although his soup is delicious, he was giving me far too much (asswagon). P. Rawne calls diabetics and others in wheelchairs asswagon.
on The Stand... an off rip by horus8
9 Feb 2003, 7:02 PM
Jesus christ I just downloaded Sergeant Pepper, I don't remember it sucking shit this bad. Gimme helter skelter any day.
replying on An Ode to minorties that use Paprika by Shardik
9 Feb 2003, 6:32 PM
Gypsies aren't hungarians - they're scum. As for the leves: Igen, kerek - ehes vagyok...ennyi eleg lesz...nem!!! ez nekem nagyon sok lesz...Nagyon isletes. Nagyon finom volt, de nem kerek tobbet. Ha ha ha who's hungarian now motherfucker.
on An Ode to minorties that use Paprika by Shardik
9 Feb 2003, 2:47 PM
Being part hungarian, I think I can help you out here: first of all, it's spelled pollack, second, the slur for Hungarians is bohunk, third, the hungarian term for paprika is paprikosh.
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
8 Feb 2003, 9:46 AM
TYPICAL NENTWINIED STUFF
on Liberal's Lament, 2003 by Frass
8 Feb 2003, 9:46 AM
NOT CLEAR ENOUGH DUDE
on The last of the sworn heels by Bachus
8 Feb 2003, 9:44 AM
EVERYTHING THEY TOLD ME ABOUT THE RENNAISANCE WAS A LIE!!! I HAVE BEEN WASTING MY VERY LIFE!!!!!!!!!!!!! A MAN IS NOT A PIECE OF FRUIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
on The last of the sworn heels by Bachus
8 Feb 2003, 9:44 AM
ANGIE....ANGIEEEEE.....AIN'T IT GOOD TO BE ALIVE...ANGIE...ANNNGIE....YOU CAN'T SAY WE NEVER, TRIE-IE-IE-IED HA HA HA HA HA HA JUST CAN'T GET ENUF
on The last of the sworn heels by Bachus
8 Feb 2003, 9:43 AM
MY NAME IS PEPITO SUAREZ AND AND AND....angie....angie
on The last of the sworn heels by Bachus
8 Feb 2003, 8:31 AM
all about i
on While mining in Tanzania by Bachus
7 Feb 2003, 7:52 PM
I HAD SEX WITH MY POTS AND PANS
on The unlucky Janitor haikus by Bachus
7 Feb 2003, 7:21 PM
Bill Z. Bub just jerked off all over my secret stash of dime store wingtips.