| Re: The Stand... an off rip by horus8 |
9-Feb-03/7:02 PM |
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Jesus christ I just downloaded Sergeant Pepper, I don't remember it sucking shit this bad. Gimme helter skelter any day.
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| Re: Magick Fingers of Love by Wulf |
9-Feb-03/9:57 PM |
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Wow you wrote all of this this year jesus fuck what are you the fucking Isaac Newton of poetry. Not bad. 8.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Feb-03/10:17 PM |
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Wow thanks for telling me. Jesus christ why not just number the stanzas and change the title to DIDACTIC adj.:
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Feb-03/10:28 PM |
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Worth working on. I mean that in a good way. 8. Work on the flow, although I like the disjointedness. I like the humanity interspersed with inhumanity, I like the trivialities. Smooth out the visual and verbal noise, twist the stronger signal around your ring finger.
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| Re: nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/1:37 PM |
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I knock on your door. I tiptoe on the floor. I hope your daddy ain't home right now - he warned once before.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
10-Feb-03/1:39 PM |
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Again your problem is length. The length of your devices and their elaborate structures really weaken the ideas. Seriously cut this the fuck up to see what happens. If you do, I'll try to help you tweak it so it says everything the original did.
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| Re: where is thy sting? by <~> |
10-Feb-03/1:42 PM |
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A bit wordy, pained etc. If this were all the case would you be writing so much?
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| Re: Exsqueeze Me? Baking Powder? by Yardbird |
10-Feb-03/1:43 PM |
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DUDE YOU NEED TO SPARK ONE UP AND/OR BUY SOME KYUSS RECORDS (Don't - kyuss suck. Qotsa is where it's at)
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| Re: nightly by <~> |
10-Feb-03/4:10 PM |
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If god exists why do the Rolling Stones so obviously kick Creed's ass?
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| Re: The Tuesday Dogs by Caducus |
10-Feb-03/6:30 PM |
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Play up the age theme and strengthen the human connection. Quite good.
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| Re: Senses by lunar |
11-Feb-03/3:43 PM |
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Senses is the second track off the first New Order album.
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| Re: My suicide note was short and sweet by horus8 |
11-Feb-03/3:44 PM |
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Maybe it's somethin' I'm born to hula
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Feb-03/3:54 PM |
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| Re: The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
11-Feb-03/7:38 PM |
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There was recently a pretty significant event in the national football league - a 'world series of football' if you will.
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| Re: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike |
11-Feb-03/7:40 PM |
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And I suppose this is in another league altogether?
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11-Feb-03/7:40 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Feb-03/7:41 PM |
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Second stanza is nice. The whores you've become is a nice illustration.
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| Re: Coffle by Wulf |
11-Feb-03/7:42 PM |
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The civil war was about slavery.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Feb-03/8:47 PM |
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| Re: Mebi by ==Doylum |
12-Feb-03/10:11 AM |
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Like something I would do. Good work.
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