poemranker ::20 most recent comments by TanHand (61-80)

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on some deleted poem 11 Feb 2003, 7:41 PM
Second stanza is nice. The whores you've become is a nice illustration.
on Exsqueeze Me? Baking Powder? by Yardbird 10 Feb 2003, 1:43 PM
DUDE YOU NEED TO SPARK ONE UP AND/OR BUY SOME KYUSS RECORDS (Don't - kyuss suck. Qotsa is where it's at)
on The Stand... an off rip by horus8 9 Feb 2003, 7:02 PM
Jesus christ I just downloaded Sergeant Pepper, I don't remember it sucking shit this bad. Gimme helter skelter any day.
on some deleted poem 11 Feb 2003, 7:40 PM
Who cares
on Mebi by ==Doylum 12 Feb 2003, 10:11 AM
Like something I would do. Good work.
on some deleted poem 11 Feb 2003, 8:47 PM
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on Senses by lunar 11 Feb 2003, 3:43 PM
Senses is the second track off the first New Order album.
on My suicide note was short and sweet by horus8 11 Feb 2003, 3:44 PM
Maybe it's somethin' I'm born to hula
on some deleted poem 11 Feb 2003, 3:54 PM
Insanity isn't sour. 3.
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos 11 Feb 2003, 7:38 PM
There was recently a pretty significant event in the national football league - a 'world series of football' if you will.
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike 11 Feb 2003, 7:40 PM
And I suppose this is in another league altogether?
on Coffle by Wulf 11 Feb 2003, 7:42 PM
The civil war was about slavery.
on nightly by <~> 10 Feb 2003, 4:10 PM
If god exists why do the Rolling Stones so obviously kick Creed's ass?
on The Tuesday Dogs by Caducus 10 Feb 2003, 6:30 PM
Play up the age theme and strengthen the human connection. Quite good.
on nightly by <~> 10 Feb 2003, 1:37 PM
I knock on your door. I tiptoe on the floor. I hope your daddy ain't home right now - he warned once before.
on some deleted poem 10 Feb 2003, 1:39 PM
Again your problem is length. The length of your devices and their elaborate structures really weaken the ideas. Seriously cut this the fuck up to see what happens. If you do, I'll try to help you tweak it so it says everything the original did.
on Magick Fingers of Love by Wulf 9 Feb 2003, 9:57 PM
Wow you wrote all of this this year jesus fuck what are you the fucking Isaac Newton of poetry. Not bad. 8.
on some deleted poem 9 Feb 2003, 10:17 PM
Wow thanks for telling me. Jesus christ why not just number the stanzas and change the title to DIDACTIC adj.:
on some deleted poem 9 Feb 2003, 10:28 PM
Worth working on. I mean that in a good way. 8. Work on the flow, although I like the disjointedness. I like the humanity interspersed with inhumanity, I like the trivialities. Smooth out the visual and verbal noise, twist the stronger signal around your ring finger.
on where is thy sting? by <~> 10 Feb 2003, 1:42 PM
A bit wordy, pained etc. If this were all the case would you be writing so much?