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Senses (Free verse) by lunar
With you in my thoughts, I can't think, because my mind is full of you. I look, but cannot see. I listen, But do not hear. I speak, but without knowing what it is that i say I am alive so why can't I live?

Up the ladder: The lyric of the cabbage
Down the ladder: Clown of Misery

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Weighted score: 5.1152606
Overall Rank: 5983
Posted: January 29, 2003 2:01 PM PST; Last modified: February 12, 2003 1:52 PM PST
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[10] Dostoyevsky @ 172.180.234.153 | 2-Feb-03/3:10 PM | Reply
but you write of love, and you love Tien so does that make you a hipporite? life isnt a game its a very cruel joke
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.137.91 > Dostoyevsky | 6-Feb-03/3:05 PM | Reply
Love is a verb. Get that straight and the rest is a cake walk.
[n/a] brazen @ 68.84.225.163 | 3-Feb-03/9:29 PM | Reply
as being a somewhat outside obeserver for my time here, seems to me the young and rising children of this site are becoming an ever angering clic against the well placed and comfortably seated old timers from before my time...i suggest a duel. at noon...because as it were, that is as well cliche.
[0] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 4-Feb-03/9:04 PM | Reply
that's funny. everytime you re-edit this some one comes along and goes 0. so 0! chiRPE! i have chirps in my sole, yes a need to chirpe from deep withyne.?
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.178.178.167 | 11-Feb-03/2:51 PM | Reply
the first line of the last couplet should be the first line of the poem. Then the senses, then the final line. what do you think?
[n/a] lunar @ 195.92.67.70 > god'swife | 12-Feb-03/1:49 PM | Reply
Hmm good idea i will change it now
[9] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 | 11-Feb-03/3:43 PM | Reply
Senses is the second track off the first New Order album.
[n/a] lunar @ 195.92.67.70 > TanHand | 12-Feb-03/1:53 PM | Reply
I didnt know that- its a fairly common word anywho
[9] TanHand @ 68.14.26.239 > lunar | 12-Feb-03/3:42 PM | Reply
Third track actually. I always forget dreams never end.
[10] Dostoyevsky @ 172.179.171.139 | 14-Feb-03/11:49 AM | Reply
reminds me of a song which has the line 'im alive i think its time to live', by lifehouse, its great song called trying, and well ike your great poety, well done kat another masterpeice
[10] MuDvAyNe @ 81.6.223.206 | 30-Mar-03/1:19 PM | Reply
gr8 chat up line. aah, a love poem, i love you!!!
[n/a] cleverdevice @ 81.131.98.175 | 12-Apr-03/1:13 PM | Reply
Hmmm, I'm seeing influence of Simon and Garfunkel...
'People talking without speaking, people listening without hearing'
Sound od Silence.
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