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Senses (Free verse) by lunar

With you in my thoughts, I can't think, because my mind is full of you. I look, but cannot see. I listen, But do not hear. I speak, but without knowing what it is that i say I am alive so why can't I live?

god'swife 11-Feb-03/2:51 PM
the first line of the last couplet should be the first line of the poem. Then the senses, then the final line. what do you think?




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