| Re: Grab Out For J. Christ! by Sing4Jesus! |
20-May-07/9:19 PM |
There are some misconceptions here, that make the zealous hodge podge verses sting even more.
God did not make our lives to be worthless.
His enemies may have killed Jesus, but according to the New Testament, this was part of God's plan... How else could he have fulfilled the passion?
And lastly, because I want to go to sleep, you actually think we could actually hurt the greatest grandest architect...You think it matters if we believe or not??
Only to our own faith... God exists regardless of us, and He or She or whatever our creator is, does not need our votes.
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| Re: Altitude by half.italian |
20-May-07/9:26 PM |
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i'm sorry, it's just not well written.
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| Re: The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina |
22-May-07/10:30 AM |
you get us about a quarter of the way there and we are begging for some chocolate milk served by kids on the side of the road.
quaint and so pastoral
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| Re: The Editor by Dovina |
22-May-07/10:34 AM |
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you need an editor. and someone to let you on to the fact: you don't buy fruit from trees, known or otherwise... and lastly, as a poet you should know all trees... tsk tsk
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| Re: Grafton Street Late Joys by Engelbert Humpalot |
9-Dec-11/11:30 AM |
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| Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
9-Dec-11/11:32 AM |
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| Re: Wind By Any Other Name by Edna Sweetlove |
30-Dec-12/1:20 PM |
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| Re: The Young Girl From Khartoum by Edna Sweetlove |
2-Sep-14/4:01 PM |
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| Re: Let's praise great Britannia's golden days of now and then by Edna Sweetlove |
2-Sep-14/4:03 PM |
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you lost me at the onset.
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| Re: "She Phoned This Morning" by ARTIE |
2-Sep-14/4:07 PM |
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sense and sensibility permeates this piece, which indeed seems more like the intro to what is a beautiful ode to love lost
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| Re: Lizzie Boredom by Bonehiss |
14-Sep-14/6:00 PM |
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i hope you did not send this to her.
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| Re: server maintenance by nentwined |
14-Sep-14/6:02 PM |
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| Re: Outliers by nypoet22 |
14-Sep-14/6:20 PM |
some of the metaphors don't work, not even surreally...
there are some great phrases here, some imagery but then too much prothletysing...
zest of a grapefruit is never sweet, always bitter.
work it.
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| Re: February by half.italian |
14-Sep-14/6:25 PM |
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this is just not written well
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| Re: Pakistan school massacre by Dhanesh M Kumar |
22-Feb-15/7:21 AM |
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there is a lot of feeling and outrage and sadness that is begging poetic justice in this poem
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| Re: A HANGMAN'S MOANING by Dhanesh M Kumar |
22-Feb-15/7:24 AM |
i love your thoughts. they are in the right place and the poem works on some levels. keep engineering the phrases. and perhaps punctuation is needed, for example:
Alas doing, for the sake of bread
no?
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| Re: What Bitches? Oh yeah, I'll be talkin major shit. by SupremeDreamer |
15-Jan-17/5:30 PM |
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Diseloquence is your invention
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| Re: Ted & Santa Go Gay by Edna Sweetlove |
8-Oct-17/7:25 PM |
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| Re: Pandora's Box by Edna Sweetlove |
8-Oct-17/7:30 PM |
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| Re: Making a Man by Christof |
8-Oct-17/9:06 PM |
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i feel the memories biting through. this is lovely. and i love how you are alluding to the inner man and the outer snow man at once...
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