| Re: Conversations with a Clock II by morffrom |
25-Jan-03/1:37 PM |
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haha i love that. thats great!!...10 all the way
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| Re: The Sands Of Time by squall1leonheart |
25-Jan-03/1:38 PM |
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you need to work on your spelling...and maybe reorganize it a little so its easier to read..everything just seems to blur together the way it is now...3
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| Re: myself by decadentlaurel |
25-Jan-03/1:39 PM |
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| Re: the salt shaker by elizabethann |
18-Mar-03/4:51 AM |
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mmm thats such an interesting idea. i love it. 8
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20-Mar-03/2:04 PM |
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wonderful word weaving. i love it. 10
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20-Mar-03/2:07 PM |
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thats good. i like how you portrayed the idea too...its beautiful. 8.
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| Re: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike |
20-Mar-03/2:08 PM |
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haha. that says it all. 8.
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| Re: wandering, north by <~> |
20-Mar-03/2:09 PM |
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mmm....its missing something, im too distanced from it for some reason. 5.
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1-Apr-03/12:37 PM |
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i was reading this and going "wow this is extremely good" but then i hit the last stanza and im afraid my wowing quit. the last stanza doesnt make much sense and it doesnt fit the rest of the poem....8
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| Re: Lossing Grip by Katie2 |
1-Apr-03/12:43 PM |
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my first clue that this might not rock my world was that the title was spelled wrong...and i dont know, its okay, but it just seems like more of the "oh poor suicidal me lets see if i can cut myself deeper and feel better" crap that im getting sick of. plus you spelled several things wrong. however, your rhyme scheme is pretty good, its not too incredibly forced, and you do have several really good lines in there. i bet that with a little rewriting this could be extremely awesome...for now...5
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| Re: a new generation by blurryphotograph |
2-Apr-03/6:04 AM |
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i dont know exactly what it is about this one...but i do believe that it just may be the best poem of yours that i have ever read. in my whole entire lifetime. the whole entire 16 years. ((16!!!:)) yeah i think i would give it a SEVENTEEN. damn restrictions
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| Re: FRAGILE by calilegzzz |
16-Apr-03/1:54 PM |
this is a piece of third grade crap in my opinion.
theres nothing about it that will stand out, that will make me remember it. its something i might have read before from some lovestruck wanna be elementary school poet. try again, my dear. 0.
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| Re: My good friend Nick by Bobjim the II |
28-Apr-03/6:05 PM |
i know a guy named nick
he makes me laugh
but i think your poem makes me laugh harder
9 for well constructed vulgarity
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| Re: Beauty, sleeping (revised) by Ranger |
2-May-03/5:37 PM |
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i really like this. it made me laugh, plus it's good poetry. it reads really smoothly...except for the "fairies, too". it just gave me a jolt like "wait a second..oh fairies..". with a better transition it would be simply wonderful! (you could even make it "my, what a big heart you have"...it seems even funnier to me) 7
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| Re: When We Parted by anitawit |
3-May-03/7:32 AM |
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thats a really interesting idea. i like it. 7
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| Re: Hippy chic under the bleachers by Shardik |
3-May-03/7:34 AM |
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haha. this is beautiful. 8.
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| Re: Too Long by Luv2write |
3-May-03/7:43 AM |
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hmmm. its good. its kind of the same old same old though. if it was written with more poetical oomph it might gain a better vote from me. 4
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| Re: Sonneting the samples & green eyes by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
3-May-03/7:45 AM |
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interesting. almost too random. i can't quite get a hold of it. you have some wicked lines in there though. 6
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3-May-03/7:50 AM |
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meh. theres no rhythm here. and yummy like chocolate? yummy is too childish for the poem. 3
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3-May-03/7:53 AM |
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thats pretty good. i like it. like ranger said though, the ending could use a little work. 7
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