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Conversations with a Clock II (Free verse) by morffrom You only want to talk to me between swings,
I mean I could take it if your tock
and tick were just for me,
trouble is you're just a tick and tock tart,
dispensing your erudite wisdom for all to hear.
Its not like I've got a lot of people to talk to,
OK there is the web but thats not real its not the deal.
There's old Jim at the paper stand he says hello,
mind you he's a tart like you he says hello to everybody.
That nice girl at MacDonalds always gives me a smile,
but she is only after my money for Big Mac and fries,
so I'm stuck with you and your promiscuous vacuity,
with your tick and your tock and your tock and your tick.
Up the ladder:
the doorman
Down the ladder:
Little Johnie's Jihad
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.869565
Posted: September 26, 2002 5:41 AM PDT; Last modified: September 26, 2002 5:41 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.853925 Overall Rank: 1549 Comments:
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26-Sep-02/6:38 AM
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ha! superb!
Very good! Funny. You're worryingly preoccupied with clocks though. You want to watch that. (Geddit? Oh ha ha). I like this very much.
I'd appreciate your vote too Christof or ZZnia not sure which one voted and who abstained, its all a way of passing the time ( sorry )
It was my vote, so you need to have words with Ms Zzinnia. I only abstain if I don't like the poem.
the stone is now cast. sorry. lazy today. had a late night. please, call me z.
hey z-thanks for the vote have you seen parts 1 and III of the trilogy
yes. i voted on all. i liked 2 and 3 much better than 1. it just didn't ... strike ... me. (ugh. sorry.)
What would happen if you changed the last line to "trick"? Too fun!
Glad not every one is so serious.
Yes... It's important to have a laugh once in a while!!!11 What do you think guys!?!?!? lol!!!!!1111111111111
Made me laugh, horologically speaking ( geddit ?)
You get a much better class of conversation with a clock. What does promiscuous vacuity mean ?
Agree with Z, this is better than 1
8/10
Trouble is you are just a tick and tock poet tart. This made me think for the first time today. Is this idiot for real or is he trying to say something a little bit deep. I think I get it-he's lonely and he wants to make a joke of it and make himself feel better-its cathartic-so as I am not an unreasonable bastard-8/10. Try again when you have a life pal.
haha i love that. thats great!!...10 all the way
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