on Front Line Center by Blindproject217
24 Apr 2003, 8:20 PM
Actually, this one isn't bad. Any specific problems?
on Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT
23 Apr 2003, 12:32 AM
whoa.
on Like and Unlike by Christof
19 Apr 2003, 10:07 PM
Not so sure about that last stanza, but the rest is Great.
You are the griddle, I am the meat. <---- sorry, that bit is from a song I'm listening to at the moment. Looooovage!
You are the griddle, I am the meat. <---- sorry, that bit is from a song I'm listening to at the moment. Looooovage!
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
18 Apr 2003, 8:51 AM
Remove her bits? A chilling thought.
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
18 Apr 2003, 8:49 AM
I thank you. Thank you.
You are a warm bath
on a cold winter night.
The way she parts the sea
with sculpted knee,
and rolls back
and runs fingers along
rivulets of wax
that speak of memorable nights
It's automatic.
Can't stop placing
simple words, each after another,
and sigh sadness...
There is such an immense sadness.
Can't you see it? Are you the one?
Here, let me guide your hand
to my brow,
cool against this broken field.
Sometimes I use it as a shield,
to hide from the acidic sun.
---------------
I don't know what that was
You are a warm bath
on a cold winter night.
The way she parts the sea
with sculpted knee,
and rolls back
and runs fingers along
rivulets of wax
that speak of memorable nights
It's automatic.
Can't stop placing
simple words, each after another,
and sigh sadness...
There is such an immense sadness.
Can't you see it? Are you the one?
Here, let me guide your hand
to my brow,
cool against this broken field.
Sometimes I use it as a shield,
to hide from the acidic sun.
---------------
I don't know what that was
replying on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub
11 Apr 2003, 6:44 PM
Thanks. This is as minimal as it's gonna get. I'm fairly happy with this revision.
replying on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub
10 Apr 2003, 8:07 AM
From now on, I'm just going to delete all trollings. BOYCOTT SETTLE AND HIS ILK.
replying on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub
10 Apr 2003, 8:04 AM
You don't have any kids, do you? :^)
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
9 Apr 2003, 9:53 AM
:^)
replying on Hunting for a vessel by Nice guy
9 Apr 2003, 8:07 AM
Ignore him/her/it, I think he/she/heshe got lost on the way to an Ain'tItCoolNews Talkbalk. Don't feed the trolls!
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
9 Apr 2003, 7:55 AM
(bowing low) Please, I am most unworthy, you embarass me! What hey? Don't stop! (puts hat back on head, as should an Gentleman)
Thankyou oh panegyrical one!
Thankyou oh panegyrical one!
replying on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus
8 Apr 2003, 3:31 PM
No, no, no, no, no, no...
Yes. Yes, use that instead. :-)
Yes. Yes, use that instead. :-)
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
8 Apr 2003, 3:28 PM
Thanks for the feedback, goode gentlesir. But I decided to try it as London Ontario. I'll see how it goes... I'll slowly revise it, phrase by phrase.
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
8 Apr 2003, 3:25 PM
THANK YOU KIND SIR!
.vidi vici.
.vidi vici.
on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus
8 Apr 2003, 3:23 PM
Love the first part. Not crazy about the second part. don't like the fat lady. But what the hellmp.
on Hunting for a vessel by Nice guy
8 Apr 2003, 3:19 PM
!
Really good!
On first reading, it really flowed, and the images strong.
Good good.
Really good!
On first reading, it really flowed, and the images strong.
Good good.
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
8 Apr 2003, 2:12 PM
thanx my friend.
on A morning conflict by INTRANSIT
8 Apr 2003, 1:43 PM
mmmmm coffee. beverage of the gods.
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
7 Apr 2003, 10:24 AM
Thank you!