| Re: Front Line Center by Blindproject217 |
24-Apr-03/8:20 PM |
Actually, this one isn't bad. Any specific problems?
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| Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT |
23-Apr-03/12:32 AM |
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| Re: Like and Unlike by Christof |
19-Apr-03/10:07 PM |
Not so sure about that last stanza, but the rest is Great.
You are the griddle, I am the meat. <---- sorry, that bit is from a song I'm listening to at the moment. Looooovage!
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
18-Apr-03/8:51 AM |
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Remove her bits? A chilling thought.
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
18-Apr-03/8:49 AM |
I thank you. Thank you.
You are a warm bath
on a cold winter night.
The way she parts the sea
with sculpted knee,
and rolls back
and runs fingers along
rivulets of wax
that speak of memorable nights
It's automatic.
Can't stop placing
simple words, each after another,
and sigh sadness...
There is such an immense sadness.
Can't you see it? Are you the one?
Here, let me guide your hand
to my brow,
cool against this broken field.
Sometimes I use it as a shield,
to hide from the acidic sun.
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I don't know what that was
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| Re: a comment on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub |
11-Apr-03/6:44 PM |
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Thanks. This is as minimal as it's gonna get. I'm fairly happy with this revision.
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| Re: a comment on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub |
10-Apr-03/8:07 AM |
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From now on, I'm just going to delete all trollings. BOYCOTT SETTLE AND HIS ILK.
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| Re: a comment on downtown bus by Bill Z Bub |
10-Apr-03/8:04 AM |
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You don't have any kids, do you? :^)
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
9-Apr-03/9:53 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Hunting for a vessel by Nice guy |
9-Apr-03/8:07 AM |
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Ignore him/her/it, I think he/she/heshe got lost on the way to an Ain'tItCoolNews Talkbalk. Don't feed the trolls!
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
9-Apr-03/7:55 AM |
(bowing low) Please, I am most unworthy, you embarass me! What hey? Don't stop! (puts hat back on head, as should an Gentleman)
Thankyou oh panegyrical one!
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| Re: a comment on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus |
8-Apr-03/3:31 PM |
No, no, no, no, no, no...
Yes. Yes, use that instead. :-)
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
8-Apr-03/3:28 PM |
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Thanks for the feedback, goode gentlesir. But I decided to try it as London Ontario. I'll see how it goes... I'll slowly revise it, phrase by phrase.
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
8-Apr-03/3:25 PM |
THANK YOU KIND SIR!
.vidi vici.
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| Re: "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus |
8-Apr-03/3:23 PM |
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Love the first part. Not crazy about the second part. don't like the fat lady. But what the hellmp.
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| Re: Hunting for a vessel by Nice guy |
8-Apr-03/3:19 PM |
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Really good!
On first reading, it really flowed, and the images strong.
Good good.
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
8-Apr-03/2:12 PM |
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| Re: A morning conflict by INTRANSIT |
8-Apr-03/1:43 PM |
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mmmmm coffee. beverage of the gods.
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| Re: Char by Amelia |
8-Apr-03/1:09 AM |
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| Re: a comment on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub |
7-Apr-03/10:24 AM |
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