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Hunting for a vessel (Free verse) by Nice guy
Do tall ships visit you every year? Do they fit in the depths of your bay? Do they brandish all of their sails full billowing? Or reserve, for the right wind. Are their hulls of sturdy wood, without decay, or infestation? Or are they merely painted over. Are they over-armed, or ill- balanced? Are they capable of carrying your needs? Do they sail the way you wish to sail? Is there enough oil to supply the lanterns? Are the ropes and lanyardsfrayed? Are the block and tackle well maintained? The deck clean and pilothouse tidy? Are the masts secured to the bark well? Can the helmsman understand and interpret a chart? Is he of good health and able to steer through the ugliest of storms? Can he read the wind? Study them. Study them all. Still, watch for the junk. Tirelessly bobbing, weaving through the market. Looking for you.

Up the ladder: escape
Down the ladder: Round Here

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.5965877
Overall Rank: 12543
Posted: April 8, 2003 3:06 PM PDT; Last modified: April 9, 2003 5:58 AM PDT
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Comments:
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 8-Apr-03/3:19 PM | Reply
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Really good!
On first reading, it really flowed, and the images strong.
Good good.
[n/a] <~> @ 64.252.187.155 | 8-Apr-03/5:22 PM | Reply
this one's awkward:

Is there adequate oil
to supply the lanterns?

too many questions; yes must be the answer.

why must you always have it your way?
[n/a] Nice guy @ 152.163.188.7 > <~> | 8-Apr-03/6:47 PM | Reply
I am a frustrated, angry little control freak. That is why.
[8] Ranger @ 213.120.56.37 > Nice guy | 9-Apr-03/11:21 AM | Reply
I really like this. I think that z is right in that there are a few too many questions. Other than that...I don't know. 8
[0] asimpleman @ 202.141.239.129 | 9-Apr-03/6:41 AM | Reply
What is this.....'NEVER BEEN TO THE DOCKS' syndrome?....0
[n/a] Nice guy @ 64.12.96.139 > asimpleman | 9-Apr-03/6:55 AM | Reply
'splain, lucy.
[9] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Nice guy | 9-Apr-03/8:07 AM | Reply
Ignore him/her/it, I think he/she/heshe got lost on the way to an Ain'tItCoolNews Talkbalk. Don't feed the trolls!
[n/a] CHRMEcountryGRL @ 205.188.209.8 | 21-Apr-03/8:08 PM | Reply
I thought this Poem was good..
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