replying on may 18 by Bill Z Bub
19 May 2003, 7:13 PM
Thank ya kindly! But I've changed it again! What do you think now?
replying on may 18 by Bill Z Bub
19 May 2003, 4:17 PM
Yeah, I'm not satisfied with the ending. Or the beginning, for that matter. I added the final two lines on the fifth edit here, because it needed something to sew it up.
Hmm.
Hmm.
on John Denver's hang-glider by horus8
19 May 2003, 4:06 PM
Great stuff.
"All fine examples of secret movement."
Here's a tenner. Don't spend it all in one place.
"All fine examples of secret movement."
Here's a tenner. Don't spend it all in one place.
replying on may 18 by Bill Z Bub
19 May 2003, 9:05 AM
Oops! I meant GAUZE, not gauss. Gauss is a german mathematician. Gauze is a thin transparent fabric with a loose weave.
I wish I knew her reasoning too.
I wish I knew her reasoning too.
replying on may 18 by Bill Z Bub
18 May 2003, 8:38 PM
Hey Intransit. Yeah, this one is a little enigmatic I suppose. You should have seen the first draft! Every re-write it gets a little clearer, I think I'm closing in on something...
I hope someone out there will get it, but dammit it's my own fault for being so damn obscure sometimes. I've already edited this 4 times tonight, so come back later, I'll have cleared up a few mysteries I hope.
But in the meantime, I hope the words are enjoyable on their own, even if the larger meaning is encrypted. I'm trying to find an equilibrium. Some words I use for the beauty and cadence, and strange levels of meaning. Style/content... and even a bit of form,
Simple language rearranged into strange orders, juxtaposed with shards of an image, arranged and ordered. I read it aloud and try to feel the rhythm... the sound, the images... And someday I hope to succeed on all levels. Someday. ****
(Was that pretentious enough?
I hope someone out there will get it, but dammit it's my own fault for being so damn obscure sometimes. I've already edited this 4 times tonight, so come back later, I'll have cleared up a few mysteries I hope.
But in the meantime, I hope the words are enjoyable on their own, even if the larger meaning is encrypted. I'm trying to find an equilibrium. Some words I use for the beauty and cadence, and strange levels of meaning. Style/content... and even a bit of form,
Simple language rearranged into strange orders, juxtaposed with shards of an image, arranged and ordered. I read it aloud and try to feel the rhythm... the sound, the images... And someday I hope to succeed on all levels. Someday. ****
(Was that pretentious enough?
on If this isn't plagiarism I don't know what is... by Yardbird
18 May 2003, 7:40 PM
Guess what? This isn't plagiarism! Why not? Because you wrote "by William Shakespeare" at the end. You didn't try to pass it off as your own.
Now that's what I call irony.
Now that's what I call irony.
replying on Let Me Breathe by Felzpoet
18 May 2003, 5:59 PM
On second thought, sometimes I'm just too kind. (How's THAT for arrogance?)
on Let Me Breathe by Felzpoet
18 May 2003, 5:54 PM
The breathy bits are okay, but this piece needs some clearasil, STAT!
(Don't mind the arrogance, it's just the thing to do) ;)
(Don't mind the arrogance, it's just the thing to do) ;)
replying on Hardest Thing by Felzpoet
18 May 2003, 4:55 PM
Yep, that's what I see too. Just checking.
on Recipe for Regaining Youth by Blade
18 May 2003, 4:32 PM
Sick.
on Hardest Thing by Felzpoet
18 May 2003, 4:24 PM
What do you see when you read this poem?
on I am your pea by Figure 8
28 Apr 2003, 12:08 AM
Zounds. I like it!
replying on deleted scenes by Bill Z Bub
27 Apr 2003, 6:20 PM
I hate Linkin Park. But I do love limeade. How did you know?
"do a little dance andthendrink a little wata"