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Endure (Free verse) by Felzpoet Itâs like nothing I ever felt before
Being without you is more than I can endure
I need you now, donât you see?
I need you and me to be
I need you to be a part of me
Youâve become such a part of me
Iâm just now beginning to see
Youâre the air I breathe
Youâre the strength I need
Youâre forever inside of me
How did you get inside of me?
Iâm nothing without, cant you see
Is it time to hide what is true?
Is it time to let you through?
Is it time for me to forget you?
I could never forget you
Letting you go is something I could never do
I canât let my heart turn to ice
I canât stab myself with that knife
I canât let you walk out of my life
For you to leave, and be in my life never-more
Would be a pain no one has ever endured before
Up the ladder:
The Martyr (Without A Cause)
Down the ladder:
Have you
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Posted: May 18, 2003 5:45 PM PDT; Last modified: May 18, 2003 5:45 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.618551 Overall Rank: 12431 Comments:
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its okay i understand
But seriously, "heart turn to ice"?
stabbed with a knife?
I need you and me to be?
It's an eggtray of bad cliche.
But keep writing, ya gotta start somewhere.
But that's just one dude's opinion. You need imagery that's a little more original, is all.