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Endure

Member since 2003 · Posted 18 May 2003 · 11 comments

Itâs like nothing I ever felt before Being without you is more than I can endure I need you now, donât you see? I need you and me to be I need you to be a part of me Youâve become such a part of me Iâm just now beginning to see Youâre the air I breathe Youâre the strength I need Youâre forever inside of me How did you get inside of me? Iâm nothing without, cant you see Is it time to hide what is true? Is it time to let you through? Is it time for me to forget you? I could never forget you Letting you go is something I could never do I canât let my heart turn to ice I canât stab myself with that knife I canât let you walk out of my life For you to leave, and be in my life never-more Would be a pain no one has ever endured before

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[2] Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/5:55 PM Reply

why.

[n/a] Felzpoet › Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/6:05 PM Reply

neva had a girl did u?
its okay i understand

[2] Bill Z Bub › Felzpoet 18-May-03/6:10 PM Reply

Good one.

But seriously, "heart turn to ice"?
stabbed with a knife?
I need you and me to be?

It's an eggtray of bad cliche.
But keep writing, ya gotta start somewhere.

[n/a] Felzpoet › Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/7:17 PM Reply

If u eva have ur heart broken ull understand i just write wut comes from my heart

[2] Bill Z Bub › Felzpoet 18-May-03/7:22 PM Reply

I understand. Believe me, I understand. But that doesn't make it a good poem.
But that's just one dude's opinion. You need imagery that's a little more original, is all.

[2] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/7:26 PM Reply

And if you're still pissed at me, feel free to critique one of my pieces. Hack it up.

[5] joydoll › Bill Z Bub 19-May-03/3:14 AM Reply

i like this poem, love isnt poetical all the time.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › joydoll 19-May-03/3:52 AM Reply

then don't write fucking poemes about it all the time.

[5] joydoll › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-May-03/3:54 PM Reply

i am truely honoured to have my first slightly abusive remark from you Dark Angel! i will keep writing crap poems as long as you keep slagging them off so elequently!

[n/a] Felzpoet › joydoll 19-May-03/5:49 PM Reply

Bill i aint pissed everyone had their opinion some people should shove thiers (not U) but it is an opinion i apretiate any feed back

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Felzpoet 19-May-03/5:51 PM Reply

What should I do with my opinion?