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Endure (Free verse) by Felzpoet

It’s like nothing I ever felt before Being without you is more than I can endure I need you now, don’t you see? I need you and me to be I need you to be a part of me You’ve become such a part of me I’m just now beginning to see You’re the air I breathe You’re the strength I need You’re forever inside of me How did you get inside of me? I’m nothing without, cant you see Is it time to hide what is true? Is it time to let you through? Is it time for me to forget you? I could never forget you Letting you go is something I could never do I can’t let my heart turn to ice I can’t stab myself with that knife I can’t let you walk out of my life For you to leave, and be in my life never-more Would be a pain no one has ever endured before

Bill Z Bub 18-May-03/6:10 PM
Good one.

But seriously, "heart turn to ice"?
stabbed with a knife?
I need you and me to be?

It's an eggtray of bad cliche.
But keep writing, ya gotta start somewhere.




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