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25-Nov-02/7:23 PM |
Funny and disturbing at the same time.
Is this "found art"? Its so demented, it could be real...
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| Re: Cocky by Goose |
25-Nov-02/7:46 PM |
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Not bad at all. I like it.
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| Re: Check Yourself by INTRANSIT |
26-Nov-02/9:19 PM |
I really liked this one.
kicked me in the gut.
because I'm feeling that way,
I'll go with an eight.
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26-Nov-02/10:08 PM |
It's a little thin, eh?
Needs more details perhaps?
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26-Nov-02/10:11 PM |
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I await more, with interest.
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27-Nov-02/4:38 PM |
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Loved t he first half, right up to "big shot", second half still good, but didn't resonate with me as much. Good work.
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| Re: Alone by ThoughtfulSoul |
27-Nov-02/4:50 PM |
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| Re: IM PISSEEDDDDDDDD by little_angel_maria |
27-Nov-02/4:56 PM |
How unseemly.
Theres some genuine emotion there, but I don't care for the imagery.
Welcome to Life.
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| Re: Exhaustion by vulcan |
27-Nov-02/5:02 PM |
This does not comply with the dictates of logical poetics.
But seriously, theres something about the word "mistress" that I just don't like. But I was going along with it until the final line.
Maybe if it was made into a Haiku?
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| Re: Life of some girl. by Plasticgirlwithgun |
28-Nov-02/3:36 PM |
Not bad, but somehow I wanted it to rhyme. The fourth line should be
"Black nails on my fist". but thats just me. I like the "Just choke" part.
And the title is good.
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| Re: Sociology of Deviance by blackball |
28-Nov-02/3:39 PM |
Really like the ending.
But I'm not sure what its about.
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| Re: Drunken note #2 by blackball |
28-Nov-02/3:55 PM |
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Well sir, I like it. I certainly do.
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| Re: A certain kind of misanthropy. by Plasticgirlwithgun |
29-Nov-02/8:47 PM |
you go grrrl!
that happened to me in high school, girl dumped me for my best friend.
that really really sucks. really really REALLY sucks. Hell, that was a decade ago, and I'm still not over it.
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30-Nov-02/3:47 PM |
a lovely story.
very fine.
here's nine.
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| Re: Ponder on Pagan. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
30-Nov-02/10:33 PM |
For thinking wide and epic and deeply,
I dub thee sir ten
ly.
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| Re: Libra by Rex Karrs |
30-Nov-02/10:45 PM |
I like, but thats because I'm a Libra...
:^)
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| Re: Devotion by Tyriana |
30-Nov-02/10:47 PM |
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| Re: FHjk by Dark Angle |
30-Nov-02/10:54 PM |
brilliant in its simplicity and directness
or not
but what the hell
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| Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
1-Dec-02/10:01 AM |
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1-Dec-02/4:48 PM |
Well, these comments certainly were ...
illuminating.
Nine, for the smug and funny and
meaningful line
breaks and some educational comments from all.
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