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Life of some girl. (Free verse) by Plasticgirlwithgun
Scars on my arm Bracelets on my wrist A ring on my finger Black polish on my nails Words on my hand "Just choke" Hate in my heart This is all I have... All I will ever need.
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.2
Weighted score: 4.7854347
Overall Rank: 11297
Posted: November 28, 2002 1:47 PM PST; Last modified: November 28, 2002 1:47 PM PST
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[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 28-Nov-02/3:36 PM | Reply
Not bad, but somehow I wanted it to rhyme. The fourth line should be
"Black nails on my fist". but thats just me. I like the "Just choke" part.
And the title is good.
[n/a] Plasticgirlwithgun @ 172.130.131.28 > Bill Z Bub | 28-Nov-02/8:33 PM | Reply
Yeah I guess that would sound better.I can't rhyme for shit though.Heh,it is all about me and how fucked up I am.Good day.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > Plasticgirlwithgun | 29-Nov-02/8:57 AM | Reply
Well,
Keep writing.
[n/a] wOrnella Mutiw @ 198.81.26.167 | 21-Dec-02/7:49 PM | Reply
maybe you should try dipping your hand in sulfuric acid...ssssssss
[n/a] Plasticgirlwithgun @ 24.48.180.31 > wOrnella Mutiw | 14-May-03/8:41 PM | Reply
Maybe I should ... ssssssss
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