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Life of some girl. (Free verse) by Plasticgirlwithgun

Scars on my arm Bracelets on my wrist A ring on my finger Black polish on my nails Words on my hand "Just choke" Hate in my heart This is all I have... All I will ever need.

Bill Z Bub 28-Nov-02/3:36 PM
Not bad, but somehow I wanted it to rhyme. The fourth line should be
"Black nails on my fist". but thats just me. I like the "Just choke" part.
And the title is good.




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