on Cant sleep, clown will eat me.(A poem about clowns) by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 6:46 PM
d'oh!
on Minoan lover by Jeremi B. Handrinos
27 Jan 2003, 6:05 PM
rad.
on some deleted poem
3 Feb 2003, 7:08 AM
sizzle!
on A Puzzling Girl by Imperfections
29 Jan 2003, 7:17 PM
The second half is excellent.
on All I Feel by brokenwing
30 Jan 2003, 8:03 PM
I quite like "Your face is gently bathed
in the moons flourescent beams,
and shows no indication
of the content of your dreams."
But you lost me with the awkwardness of
"I have never known such beauty
as the body lying on my bed 3 feet away,
who seems to grow even more so
when touched by the light of day."
How about: "I've never known such beauty
as that which rests 3 feet away.
You seem to grow much more so,
untouched by light of day.
in the moons flourescent beams,
and shows no indication
of the content of your dreams."
But you lost me with the awkwardness of
"I have never known such beauty
as the body lying on my bed 3 feet away,
who seems to grow even more so
when touched by the light of day."
How about: "I've never known such beauty
as that which rests 3 feet away.
You seem to grow much more so,
untouched by light of day.
on some deleted poem
29 Jan 2003, 8:44 PM
Blub!
Last stanza is magic. mmm.
Last stanza is magic. mmm.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2003, 7:10 PM
Interesting.
on Emergency by Nicholas Jones
27 Jan 2003, 5:49 PM
Not bad. In fact, I like it. Quite a bit. Very good.
on Nobody by Nicholas Jones
27 Jan 2003, 5:55 PM
enjoyable, evocative, and nifty. I saw the lonesome walker.
on ku-4 by Crakyamuni
27 Jan 2003, 9:30 PM
"death friends" or "death, friends"? And what's so decent about passion?
on some deleted poem
27 Jan 2003, 9:39 PM
If you're going to invoke my unholy name, please spell it correctly!
It's either Beelzebub or Bill Z. Bub. And make sure the pentagram is nice and big. And a virgin to "sacrifice" would be nice.
In the future be sure to check your copy of the Dungeons & Dragons Monster Manual for the correct spelling of the names of Demons and Devils.
It's either Beelzebub or Bill Z. Bub. And make sure the pentagram is nice and big. And a virgin to "sacrifice" would be nice.
In the future be sure to check your copy of the Dungeons & Dragons Monster Manual for the correct spelling of the names of Demons and Devils.
on some deleted poem
27 Jan 2003, 9:49 PM
Wow.
Anybody have a gong?
Anybody have a gong?
on some deleted poem
27 Jan 2003, 5:49 AM
Yummy. Tentententententen!
on some deleted poem
25 Jan 2003, 7:06 PM
cool.
on Starving at Tiffany's by horus8
24 Jan 2003, 3:14 PM
Here's a tongue-twister for ya:
Sven said "Ted,
send ten tents".
Ted said "Sven,
send ten cents".
When Sven sent
Ted ten cents,
Ted sent Sven
ten cent tents.
Try to say that one even once, I dares ya.
Sven said "Ted,
send ten tents".
Ted said "Sven,
send ten cents".
When Sven sent
Ted ten cents,
Ted sent Sven
ten cent tents.
Try to say that one even once, I dares ya.
on some deleted poem
25 Jan 2003, 7:27 PM
As the temporary King of Poemranker (missing time is currently in the #1 spot), I dub thee ...
humourous and odd and brilliant. You bum.
humourous and odd and brilliant. You bum.
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos
2 Feb 2003, 7:38 PM
>insert comment here<
on 3.85g by Crakyamuni
25 Jan 2003, 7:08 PM
liked the first two stanzas, but the second half lost me.