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Minoan lover

by Jeremi B. Handrinos

Member since 2003 · Posted 21 Jan 2003 · 13 comments

Crete is where I left you On the first day of Spring Crete is where I left you With kiss and golden ring Crete is where I left you To go fight a King's war Crete is where I left you On a boat from the shore Crete is where I left you Though it tore out my heart Crete is where I left you In a house with no start Crete is where I left you While I die on this field Crete is where I left you With my son and my shield.

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13 comments

[9] <~> 21-Jan-03/6:44 PM Reply
this would make a fuck of a villanelle, h
[9] INTRANSIT 22-Jan-03/7:22 AM Reply
My name is Maximus Desimus Meridius
Commander of the armies of the north
General of the felix legions
Loyal servant to the true emporer
Marcus Aurelius.
Father to a murdered son,
husband to a murdered wife,
and I will have my vengeance,
in this life or the next.
[9] <~> › INTRANSIT 22-Jan-03/7:31 AM Reply
indeed.
[9] INTRANSIT › <~> 22-Jan-03/7:33 AM Reply
i'm busted! really though, any minute now.
[n/a] god'swife › INTRANSIT 22-Jan-03/9:26 PM Reply
Have you got the costume that goes with this soliloquy? I'd cream to see you step of the truck in leather breast-plate and pleated skirt. This is the part were I through my box of popcorn at the screen and walked out. I wrote " I Am the Widow of a Murdered Husband" that night. Mr. Crowe is the spitting image of my beloved's father, no kidding. I loved him in L.A. Confidential, and thought he did a great job with the crap he was given in Beautiful Mind, but this movie is a stinker all around. Foochy!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › god'swife 27-Jan-03/6:10 PM Reply
Is this Movieranker now? I wouldn't call it a stinker, but it sure didn't deserve an Oscar. Neither did Crowe. That bearded bastard. Okay, I'm just being petty now. and jealous.
Oh, and the poem is good. It feels Hellenic.
[n/a] god'swife › Bill Z Bub 28-Jan-03/12:34 AM Reply
Tell me Billy-boy, why is it every other reply I get from you contains the word 'jealous'? What exactly makes you jealous? That I'm contemplating other men besides you? Are you becoming possessive? You puzzle me.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › god'swife 28-Jan-03/12:42 AM Reply
Mere coincidence my dear. My dislike of Crowe has nothing to do with you. You just happened to bring up the name. How could I be possesive of you? I don't know you. I don't know your name or what you look like or how old you are...
Just that you write divinely, and are very insightful. Thats it. It's four AM over here. I need to go to sleep. zzzzzzzzzzzzz
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Bill Z Bub 28-Jan-03/12:45 AM Reply
She's 52, she looks like a raisin and her name is Ambyr Nyghtfyre.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom 27-Jan-03/5:37 PM Reply
Not Bad for a chode but It seems a little repetive i gave it a six
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 27-Jan-03/6:05 PM Reply
rad.
[6] [mojo] 21-Apr-05/12:03 AM Reply
Different. It bears the repetition well, but starts to founder. I'd cut verse 3. "House with no start" seems nonsencicle, or stretched at best.
[5] jh99 28-Feb-10/5:43 AM Reply
Too many forced rhymes. The concept is original but the forced rhymes ruin it. Good start though.