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Minoan lover (Lyric) by Jeremi B. Handrinos Crete is where I left you
On the first day of Spring
Crete is where I left you
With kiss and golden ring
Crete is where I left you
To go fight a King's war
Crete is where I left you
On a boat from the shore
Crete is where I left you
Though it tore out my heart
Crete is where I left you
In a house with no start
Crete is where I left you
While I die on this field
Crete is where I left you
With my son and my shield.
Up the ladder:
Another Tragic Love Poem
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Posted: January 21, 2003 5:59 PM PST; Last modified: January 21, 2003 5:59 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.7633576 Overall Rank: 1778 Comments:
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this would make a fuck of a villanelle, h
My name is Maximus Desimus Meridius
Commander of the armies of the north General of the felix legions Loyal servant to the true emporer Marcus Aurelius. Father to a murdered son, husband to a murdered wife, and I will have my vengeance, in this life or the next.
indeed.
i'm busted! really though, any minute now.
Have you got the costume that goes with this soliloquy? I'd cream to see you step of the truck in leather breast-plate and pleated skirt. This is the part were I through my box of popcorn at the screen and walked out. I wrote " I Am the Widow of a Murdered Husband" that night. Mr. Crowe is the spitting image of my beloved's father, no kidding. I loved him in L.A. Confidential, and thought he did a great job with the crap he was given in Beautiful Mind, but this movie is a stinker all around. Foochy!
Is this Movieranker now? I wouldn't call it a stinker, but it sure didn't deserve an Oscar. Neither did Crowe. That bearded bastard. Okay, I'm just being petty now. and jealous.
Oh, and the poem is good. It feels Hellenic.
Tell me Billy-boy, why is it every other reply I get from you contains the word 'jealous'? What exactly makes you jealous? That I'm contemplating other men besides you? Are you becoming possessive? You puzzle me.
Mere coincidence my dear. My dislike of Crowe has nothing to do with you. You just happened to bring up the name. How could I be possesive of you? I don't know you. I don't know your name or what you look like or how old you are...
Just that you write divinely, and are very insightful. Thats it. It's four AM over here. I need to go to sleep. zzzzzzzzzzzzz
She's 52, she looks like a raisin and her name is Ambyr Nyghtfyre.
Not Bad for a chode but It seems a little repetive i gave it a six
rad.
Different. It bears the repetition well, but starts to founder. I'd cut verse 3. "House with no start" seems nonsencicle, or stretched at best.
Too many forced rhymes. The concept is original but the forced rhymes ruin it. Good start though.
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