I would love to have some comments regarding the revised work, because it's not the finished article as I'm sure many people will tell you. That's fair enough, and I have no argument with it. However I do have an argument with the people who give poems zeros just because they don't like the idea of someone being good at poetry. I think that that is what Mikius was talking about, he wasn't actually referring to you, because you do give help to less experienced poets.
I have to question how 'experienced' poetandknowit is at writing poetry, because he never really seems to know how to criticise a poem-"It sounds like a 13-year old who's just ejaculated for the first time", what the fuck is he talking about? That doesn't help me in any way, shape or form. There are plenty of great poets on this site, but none will get the recognition they deserve because the 'big names' seem to just vote them out of contention. So much for the poemranker hierarchy.
Anyway, thanks for the help, if you have any more advice, please let me know.

Thank you for the advice, it's nice to have some useful help!
I've changed it a bit, does it work now? I don't really want to reduce it because it doesn't make sense when read, however if you or anyone else can see a way to shorten it, please let me know. (Please don't put 'Delete it all', that's just not original now, is it!)

This is supposed to be a poem to show that we don't really know a thing...what better way than confusion? If you don't understand a poem, it doesn't mean it's bad.
Are you seriously saying that there is nothing in here worthy of praise? If so, I would ask you to stop voting from the head and start voting from the heart-just because something doesn't conform to all the rules is no reason to instantly dismiss it. Did this poem not conjure up images in your head? I tried to write it that way so it would. If I failed, then either this needs to be reworked (it is only a draft, after all), or you have no imagination at all.
How many people here know anything about epistemology? It's fascinating, but confusing. It's exactly the same with this poem.

Nope, not yet.

You're gay. Have you any idea about Philosophy-or anything for that matter? You obviously don't understand anything I said in this-go read Descartes.
So to your vote, what is fundamentally wrong with this? Yes it's a draft, but the main part of the content is fine as far as I can see. Stop bullshitting and give me some relevant reasons for your votes.
Anyway, you can't even prove that this poem exists.

Epistemology is the theory of knowledge, a section of the Philosophy A level course. Such thinkers as Descartes and Socrates figure highly, as does Bishop Berkeley, the founder of recent Idealism, just in case poetandknowit thinks I'm bluffing knowledge.

Cheers dude, nice to see there are people on here who aren't twats!