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Mannequin (draft) (Free verse) by Ranger Perfect human sculpture
Vanity idolised
As you pose, waiting
For the imminent portrait
I will draw,
Joints and all
I can control your curves,
Your polished pine highlights
Yet those subtle postures
Of yours, I cannot master
My picture
An exact replica
Image of a flawed perfection
And I see it and weep
As anger grows
I shake you
Throw you
Hit you
Your neck twists
Limbs at broken angles
And with a crack
You snap back to life
Then you smile at me
Though you have no mouth
And I pick up my pencil
And draw
You have won
Up the ladder:
Drinking Knowledge
Down the ladder:
Tales From The Outhouse
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.225
Posted: January 2, 2003 12:53 PM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2003 12:53 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.2249446 Overall Rank: 952 Comments:
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INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.106
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2-Jan-03/3:16 PM
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Did you eve see my "Morning conflict"? If not, tell me and I'll repost. I don't know what to do with this piece. Feels just short, for some reason.
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Ranger @ 81.132.42.59
> INTRANSIT
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3-Jan-03/6:49 AM
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Nope, not yet.
Have you been watching The Manaquin....a popular 80s movie. I especially liked the black guy with the pink Cadillac......ahhh...it's like a scene from West Hollywood.
Excellent. What were you smoking?
You won't learn anything useful from drawing statues. Zero because you didn't know that.n
You learn how to draw statues, dumbfuck.
You have a thing about zero, don't you. Presumably it's the number of your IQ. Or maybe it's the amount of people who like you.
That hurt. Why must you make it personal?? Here have a 10
Excellent. I share your rage at inanimate objects trying to piss me off. Come on, other people kick the door whent they walk into it too!
yes
Howcome you were 2nd in the top 15? its so unfair that people can fuck about with votes, heres a 10 for your injustice it deservred it
Thank you, and yes, it is very irritating that people will continue to display idiocy when faced with some unknown person appearing in the top, but still, that's life.
Oh well, I can do naught but write.
Also it is nice to see that all the zeros are anonymous, whereas the tens are mostly from users.
I suppose it just goes to show.
Damn, a poem I like. You really are a FUCKFACE.
Nice, Pygmalion getting very frustrated. The violence is very well done, which is rare.
I like this! The last stanza is not as well-formed as it might have been, but overall I like this.
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