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Free verse № 33199

Mannequin (draft)

by Ranger

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Jan 2003 · 15 comments

Perfect human sculpture Vanity idolised As you pose, waiting For the imminent portrait I will draw, Joints and all I can control your curves, Your polished pine highlights Yet those subtle postures Of yours, I cannot master My picture An exact replica Image of a flawed perfection And I see it and weep As anger grows I shake you Throw you Hit you Your neck twists Limbs at broken angles And with a crack You snap back to life Then you smile at me Though you have no mouth And I pick up my pencil And draw You have won

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15 comments

[8] INTRANSIT 2-Jan-03/3:16 PM Reply
Did you eve see my "Morning conflict"? If not, tell me and I'll repost. I don't know what to do with this piece. Feels just short, for some reason.
[n/a] Ranger › INTRANSIT 3-Jan-03/6:49 AM Reply
Nope, not yet.
[7] wOrnella Mutiw 2-Jan-03/4:58 PM Reply
Have you been watching The Manaquin....a popular 80s movie. I especially liked the black guy with the pink Cadillac......ahhh...it's like a scene from West Hollywood.
[10] Another Bobjim?!?! 2-Jan-03/5:33 PM Reply
Excellent. What were you smoking?
[10] -=SeTTle=- 3-Jan-03/5:57 PM Reply
You won't learn anything useful from drawing statues. Zero because you didn't know that.n
[n/a] Ranger › -=SeTTle=- 4-Jan-03/5:06 AM Reply
You learn how to draw statues, dumbfuck.
You have a thing about zero, don't you. Presumably it's the number of your IQ. Or maybe it's the amount of people who like you.
[10] -=SeTTle=- › Ranger 4-Jan-03/1:06 PM Reply
That hurt. Why must you make it personal?? Here have a 10
[n/a] cleverdevice 6-Jan-03/7:58 AM Reply
Excellent. I share your rage at inanimate objects trying to piss me off. Come on, other people kick the door whent they walk into it too!
[5] deleted user 8-Jan-03/6:34 AM Reply
yes
[10] scitz 8-Jan-03/9:03 AM Reply
Howcome you were 2nd in the top 15? its so unfair that people can fuck about with votes, heres a 10 for your injustice it deservred it
[n/a] Ranger › scitz 9-Jan-03/2:42 AM Reply
Thank you, and yes, it is very irritating that people will continue to display idiocy when faced with some unknown person appearing in the top, but still, that's life.
Oh well, I can do naught but write.
[n/a] Ranger › Ranger 9-Jan-03/2:44 AM Reply
Also it is nice to see that all the zeros are anonymous, whereas the tens are mostly from users.
I suppose it just goes to show.
[10] poemwanker 11-Jan-03/6:34 AM Reply
Damn, a poem I like. You really are a FUCKFACE.
[9] razorgrin 29-Jan-03/6:40 AM Reply
Nice, Pygmalion getting very frustrated. The violence is very well done, which is rare.
[7] LilMsLadyPoet 3-Mar-06/8:38 AM Reply
I like this! The last stanza is not as well-formed as it might have been, but overall I like this.