Comments byRanger, 1741–1760 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on The Ode that never was by Shardik 25 Jan 2003, 9:04 AM
Whert?
replying on The Ode that never was by Shardik 25 Jan 2003, 9:04 AM
Good stuff. Worth a nine now.
on Abused by scitz 25 Jan 2003, 9:00 AM
I think that the end should be different, stronger somehow. The last two lines don't really do the poem justice-otherwise I like this one too. 9

PS 'Masquerades an awful truth' is brilliant!
replying on Why my cock attracts idiots by horus8 25 Jan 2003, 8:53 AM
I love it!
replying on Starving at Tiffany's by horus8 25 Jan 2003, 8:51 AM
glraorble
on The Ode that never was by Shardik 23 Jan 2003, 11:37 AM
Oh, but please change "would of" to "would have". Please.
on The Ode that never was by Shardik 23 Jan 2003, 11:36 AM
Oh...I really wanted to be sarcatic and rename it the Ode that never should have been...but it's actually quite funny.
Maybe next time. I'll go and read Blade's work to see real crap. Or not.
replying on Stars of the sky by GTK 23 Jan 2003, 11:33 AM
That was the BEST, absolute BEST exploration of constructive criticism I've ever seen!!!!

Oh wait...actually it's sarcasm.

Quite.
on 9/11 tribute by Caducus 23 Jan 2003, 11:23 AM
I really love this.
"That image of love will never sleep". Magic
I think I agree with Tintagiles about the Osama's beard bit, however I like the use of angels, also the 'slaughter' maximises the effect of that part (I know I sound vague here, never mind).
If you can find a way to replace the old beard this will be worth a ten on my behalf, till then you may have nine.
on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit 23 Jan 2003, 11:18 AM
An enjoyable read (although it was quite difficult to concentrate-must not listen to Crash Test Dummies while reading poetry!).
Yes, anyway-this is good, Mr. poetandknowit. I especially like the last bit of the second stanza very much. It's something slightly different to normal.
Perhaps now that I've acknowledged you're a good writer you'll feel more inclined to give me some help? :)
It would be greatly appreciated.
Regardless, I think I'll give this a nine.
replying on The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz 22 Jan 2003, 1:18 PM
Hey, have you seen "Thumb Wars"? apparantley it's hilarious...speak to Yardbird!
on The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz 22 Jan 2003, 1:17 PM
Oh dear, scitz, you crack me up yet again...9!
And yes, ewoks do kick ass (if they can reach, that is!)
on Sex with a hairy brazilian by scitz 22 Jan 2003, 1:15 PM
Good work, scitz, good work!
replying on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird 21 Jan 2003, 6:36 AM
You nasty man, you should be ashamed of yourself...where would the poor tree fit? So mean, you are, and stingy too. hmph.
replying on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird 21 Jan 2003, 5:11 AM
*shoosh*
Don't let the secret out...dude!
replying on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird 21 Jan 2003, 5:08 AM
Not at all-everyone knows that trees have no bones. Silly.

Ask Bobjim next time!
on Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird 21 Jan 2003, 5:07 AM
Marvellous...just marvellous.
on Liberty bells & Disney Land by horus8 21 Jan 2003, 1:37 AM
Bonza!
on Alms for the Digger by Wulf 21 Jan 2003, 1:33 AM
First verse doesn't seem to fit with the feel of the rest of this one. Take it out and turn it into a new poem 'cause it's great (well I really like it!).
I'm not sure what to vote this, I'll have another read and think about it.
on Surreal by wordontheverge 21 Jan 2003, 1:29 AM
Like the end! Nice work, perhaps you could do another version of this and bring out the surreality (just for lil old me!) because I'd love to see more images-check out my 'Am I Still Here' if you want.

Yes anyway, a good poem here's a nine.