Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/2:53 PM
Don't bother with Nietzsche. Plato's much more interesting. I still like the concept of this poem, although it does feel very film-esque.
Re: Settling in by INTRANSIT	13-Mar-06/2:50 PM
Another enjoyable ditty, particularly the semi-repetition 'sliding/siding' at the beginning and end. Is 'dryer' part of a truck (as I assume washers are)? Nice onomatopoeic tricks. I trust you don't have to live in your motor all winter?
Re: Call me Floyed by FreeFormFixation	13-Mar-06/1:23 PM
I don't know the Bob and Tom show, but this was still good fun.
Re: -untitled- by MacFrantic	13-Mar-06/1:22 PM
Except for stanza 2 this made me think of a news photographer, possibly a war reporter in a darkroom developing photographs (not that he'd be doing much else in a darkroom, I assume). Not sure what to make of stanza 2. I like the choice of language here, although it's fairly zany in places it nonetheless retains a semblance of sense. I struggle with 'Diphthong's ripe imbalance' though. Enjoyed. 8
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:45 AM
Out of curiosity, are you a teacher?
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:44 AM
That was epic...
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:38 AM
Ironic, yet I suspect universal.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:25 AM
Why the fuck did I just start that comment with 'See' as well? You're sending subliminal messages again, aren't you?
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:24 AM
See, over here we have to be really careful when phoning the emergency services, because if we're not looking when we dial we run a serious risk of getting through to Hell's call centre by mistake.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:20 AM
So any number you pick will be 'one of a myriad'. Now, I don't know if that featured in Dovina's thoughts when she wrote this, but it's not such a bad idea.
Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/9:05 AM
1 + 8 + 3 = 12 12 = 3 times 4 3 = the number of God 4 = the number of the universe Therefore 12 = the number of everything So if you were writing a gospel of revelations, 183 could indeed be highly symbolic. Or it could be a number plucked purely at random off a number tree. I really don't know.
Re: a comment on Emo Kid by Fayt	13-Mar-06/8:34 AM
Done. 8 as it made me laugh. And maybe, just maybe, one day I will write a tribute to the emo scene.
Re: a comment on The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	13-Mar-06/8:30 AM
A fair point - there is a purpose to the word choice there. First (and least of all) it's in keeping with the fairground 'merry-go-round' theme. Second, it's one of the reactions you'd tend to get from ride attendants to children who've suddenly decided they don't like the ride they're on. And thirdly it attempts to encapsulate the sort of attitude of people who gang up on individuals for kicks (no pun intended); they quite clearly can't understand why it's distressing for the individual being pushed around (teacup twirl). With any luck, that explanation will make things a bit clearer. Personally I despise the theme in this, but as a poem I think it works quite well.
Re: a comment on Boundaries by Dhanesh M Kumar	13-Mar-06/8:18 AM
Actually, having thought about the context, I really like the last two lines of stanza 2.
Re: a comment on Boundaries by Dhanesh M Kumar	13-Mar-06/8:15 AM
Makes more sense now, although I still stick by what I said about the grammar. 'Crackle the chains' is certainly clearer with the interpretation, as is 'Staggering changeling'. Decent theme.
Re: to a girl from msn by francis nor capule	13-Mar-06/8:04 AM
Pretty cool, the title makes it sound as though she's from halfway across the world. Do you know her in reality, or just over the net?
Re: Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	13-Mar-06/7:58 AM
With the exception of 'unmatched and unmatchable' this made me think of The Island. Which, although I was sceptical, wasn't a terrible film. 'Called, with affection, odd' Marvellous. 9
Re: Send The Devil... by horus8	13-Mar-06/7:53 AM
Awesome. Stanzas 2, 3 and 4 rocked my world, as did the final two lines. It's been too long since I last read your stuff.
Re: i want to know how the japanese type by hendrimike	13-Mar-06/7:43 AM
Brief, simple and fairly effective. The title was the best part though.
Re: Even the elephants by ecargo	13-Mar-06/7:40 AM
Vivid! Very few poems actually take me to the scene; this one is an exception. Once again I think your word choice is impeccable...no fault with this one whatsoever. Stanza 3 was great and stanza 4 was even better!