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-untitled- (Free verse) by MacFrantic
Carrion's distraught embrace
A falling angel's face
A life's long honest morn
Amidst the melancholy corn
Diphthong's ripe imbalance
Often crested high with ice
Military turbulence from
Curling flames suffice
Light cascading sandy darkness
Brimming to a stunted press
Spanning fate's eternal sight
In combs of colorless delight
Sharp congealing apparition
Cautiously prepared
Meet in undeveloped sunsets
Twisted mouth's despair
Luminous distention bends
To sacrosanct pathetic ends
Palsied condescending smiles
Wallowing in empty wiles
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8791
Posted: March 13, 2006 1:08 PM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2006 1:08 PM PST
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I like the choice of language here, although it's fairly zany in places it nonetheless retains a semblance of sense. I struggle with 'Diphthong's ripe imbalance' though.
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