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Room 34 Ashford Hospital (Free verse) by Caducus
Her cold marbled hand left my grasp
and the changeling appeared
shrieking cunt, cunt.
Pristine orderlies arrived
Her eyes darkened to onyx
crying for her Mummy
as she combed her scalp,
leaving ploughs of coral scurf.
Sedated, she spoke my name,
surrounded by snapshots of bygone holidays
where sheâd cover my shoulders from the sun,
looking like a woman,
and not a ghost haunted by this life before her.
I leave her with something new,
from old times
hoping sheâll remember
knowing that she wonât.
I kiss her sanguine cheek
whispering I love her,
she pushes me away smiling
with tears brining her eyes.
inspired by 'The Arundel Tomb' by P.Larkin
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Posted: October 11, 2004 5:12 AM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2006 5:40 AM PDT
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with brine-shrimp tearing at my eyes.
I do hope someone gives it a shot.