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i want to know how the japanese type (Free verse) by hendrimike
i don't want to see brokeback mountain i want to ignore the hype wrestle with my emotions off that girl i like or liked, who knows she is waiting around the bend with a piece of paper and a pen with her name written fine and her number's underlined but i never reach that street where the two of us could meet because i have lost the directions which complicates the situation i hear her name echo around in my head but my brain can't listen to what is being said

Up the ladder: On Youth Revisited
Down the ladder: runs away

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.905148
Overall Rank: 9695
Posted: March 11, 2006 12:30 AM PST; Last modified: March 11, 2006 12:30 AM PST
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[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.109 | 12-Mar-06/10:44 PM | Reply
Well I don't want to see Brokeback Mountain either, but the poem could do with a little more thought, some rhyme or rhythm, or beautiful language.
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 13-Mar-06/7:43 AM | Reply
Brief, simple and fairly effective.

The title was the best part though.
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