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i want to know how the japanese type (Free verse) by hendrimike

i don't want to see brokeback mountain i want to ignore the hype wrestle with my emotions off that girl i like or liked, who knows she is waiting around the bend with a piece of paper and a pen with her name written fine and her number's underlined but i never reach that street where the two of us could meet because i have lost the directions which complicates the situation i hear her name echo around in my head but my brain can't listen to what is being said

Blue Magpie 12-Mar-06/10:44 PM
Well I don't want to see Brokeback Mountain either, but the poem could do with a little more thought, some rhyme or rhythm, or beautiful language.




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