Re: All I Feel by brokenwing |
31-Jan-03/3:31 AM |
look up 'interlunium' on the net its about the moon. there are some beautiful latin phrases for nature check them out her at...catholicarchives.nd.eu for translation of english to latin.
for expample: falling = caducus
beautiful = endymion (who was a beautiful young man loved by the moon).
It may or may not give you a little inspiration.
Please read tintagiles work hes a great poet who paints the scene enchantedly, i guarantee you'll like the one about the bare breasted maiden beneath the moonlight.
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Re: All I Feel by brokenwing |
31-Jan-03/3:33 AM |
that website is actually wrong its ...italatin.com/latin.html
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Re: It's Over by Jigg |
31-Jan-03/6:03 AM |
add a chorus for you have something here maybe -7
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Re: Elegy by Quarton |
31-Jan-03/6:05 AM |
you seem unblocked this aint too bad
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Re: The Merry Man by Teen14 |
1-Feb-03/1:29 AM |
pretty good but the line has the joy of a 1000 little boys and girls sent a shiver down my spine -7-
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Re: Run Forest! Run... by Bachus |
1-Feb-03/4:32 AM |
you are mad...but funny too -7
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Re: Because The Ground Is Still Frozen by razorgrin |
1-Feb-03/4:34 AM |
My mate has a boa constrictor and keeps frozen rodents for his treats, this was one shaken martini --------------> 7
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Re: Dancers of the Night by Teen14 |
1-Feb-03/4:36 AM |
pretty much agree with JC some nice imgery here, think the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza needs a re-edit, it kind of goes a bit off there but a good read
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regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Feb-03/4:42 AM |
last 5 lines left me cold, up to that point i thought it was enchanted and descriptive, i know your a fan of imagery in poetry and you almost had it here. I dont always have time to do re-writes maybe your the same but the end of this poem needs more thought provoking lines.=====>7
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Re: Life by marvelis |
1-Feb-03/4:45 AM |
There is no such word as gloriest, how about ..and the humblest.
Not a great alternative but an apt decription, I'll think about it but i am trying to read as much today as possible on p/r -6-
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Re: Confession by marvelis |
1-Feb-03/4:50 AM |
Reality is insanity it kills your belief in dreams, take a picture spill your wine, drown yourself in alkaline.
that was my thought whilst reading this and dont ask me why.
reactions are interesting when you read certain poems, this is good in my humble opinion however i do fear votes/comments will be split on this -8
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regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Feb-03/4:53 AM |
Beautiful, you always notice the small things we miss in our lives and explain them so exquisitely, a shame you hardly ever comment on anyones work I know I for one would appreciate your input. *10*
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Re: wanker by w~* ATHENA *~w |
1-Feb-03/4:55 AM |
geller is a pervert he is as bent as his spoons.
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Re: setting the record straight on April by poetandknowit |
3-Feb-03/1:59 AM |
and you have the gall to call my work bad, I wouldnt even wipe my ass on this boring shit
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Re: Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit |
3-Feb-03/2:06 AM |
5th from last line, hmm I wonder why they do that, you cant buy being a nice person, as for the poem can you seriously expect me to believe that anyone under 16 would like this? and bla blah blah ( annoying isn't it when people are nasty and insulting without actually offering help, being pompous though isn't me I will leve that to u
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regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Feb-03/6:03 AM |
Scitz says thanks hes had his first boner in weeks
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Re: An Ode to the professor, but not Marianne by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
4-Feb-03/2:28 AM |
Deliciously evil and offensive 8
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regarding some deleted poem... |
4-Feb-03/2:33 AM |
Having written about loss so much from experience I can offer you my empathy, what you need to do is not try and write a poem but write how you feel down in your moments of profound sorrow and then think of the most personal moments you shared and tell the story past to present, then you will immortalize your uncle and that is the most fitting way I found coping in the dark hours.
I wrote one called 'goodbye dad' please read it if you've not already, condolences by the way.
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Re: What the runes said by INTRANSIT |
4-Feb-03/8:17 AM |
liked the opening it really grabbed my attention and this ones a sticker. 8
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Re: 42 by brazen |
4-Feb-03/8:20 AM |
42? my guess is this about the columbia but 42 wasnt the angle they were supposed to fly in at, put us all out of our misery as i will forget next week to re read it, liked it though but it would help to know why i liked it 7=
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