on fragile by Bill Z Bub
22 Aug 2003, 8:17 AM
The fat belly suits this beauty 9
on Involunarily yours, by jacqui
29 Sep 2003, 9:23 AM
Loads of potential but messy - very messy. 5
on Manila by poetandknowit
17 Sep 2003, 2:44 AM
I can picture you sitting there absorbing the sights and sounds that fuelled the mood so well expressed in this poem.
Yes, I absolutely love this.
(God its nice being nice aint it?) ^10^
Yes, I absolutely love this.
(God its nice being nice aint it?) ^10^
on Manila by poetandknowit
17 Sep 2003, 2:45 AM
Ever heard of hitting a nail on its head?
rickshaws pedaling giddy tourists on goodwill jaunts
along the slithers and scattered patches of asphalt.
rickshaws pedaling giddy tourists on goodwill jaunts
along the slithers and scattered patches of asphalt.
on A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Aug 2003, 8:24 AM
And isn't it amazing what 2000 quid will get you - a shot point blank in the face in Coventry where i be.
on -- by OneFingerAnswer
22 Aug 2003, 8:26 AM
nice pimple but you lose a point for not mentioning crimson rivers -its essential in a pimple- 9
on What you know by INTRANSIT
23 Aug 2003, 12:17 PM
As always your writing intrigues. I had a problem with line 2 its a bit of a flow killer.
However the way you used lizard was good, though they tend to turret their eyes other than move due to their prey instict. The best for me was where you went with the message and your strength for me has always been that you have a strong beginning, middle, and end, a depth in words yet with a clarity of expression.
8
However the way you used lizard was good, though they tend to turret their eyes other than move due to their prey instict. The best for me was where you went with the message and your strength for me has always been that you have a strong beginning, middle, and end, a depth in words yet with a clarity of expression.
8
on Trollop: A Married Mans Revenge by DreamerSupreme
23 Aug 2003, 12:20 PM
Horus will love this. You just can't put the man down and he bleeds olive.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2003, 8:15 AM
2nd and 3rd Stzas were a trip and a half - fantastic. Loved line7/9 and all of 3rd - I fell like alice, very polished, full of rich vivid language 9
on some deleted poem
23 Aug 2003, 12:21 PM
I have made a note for me and my bro
on some deleted poem
24 Sep 2003, 8:19 AM
You KNOW you can do better than this, hate to do this but i gotta - 4
on some deleted poem
24 Sep 2003, 8:21 AM
love the hard hail that kills, love hide like the sky (for they can't) its irony and ecstacy in one shot. Last part hits hard 9
on When my poems go platinum by horus8
24 Sep 2003, 8:14 AM
3rd part disturbed me deliciously so. 9
on some deleted poem
24 Sep 2003, 8:16 AM
Very brief for you but all 3 lines complement each other and say what needed to be said so to an 8 i go.
on some deleted poem
24 Sep 2003, 8:17 AM
Easy on the happy pills joe.
Some nice mome's and some not so nice but here is an anti-religion gold star 7
Some nice mome's and some not so nice but here is an anti-religion gold star 7
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2003, 9:13 AM
I've never lost a game yet - honest -
on Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
29 Sep 2003, 9:20 AM
Loved the opening.
It reminded me of a pimple rap rant. Thanks for cheering me up on this miserable monday. 8
It reminded me of a pimple rap rant. Thanks for cheering me up on this miserable monday. 8
on Involunarily yours, by jacqui
29 Sep 2003, 9:25 AM
Line 2 is the type of line you need to use consistently. Line 6 is reader asphyxiation.
Your ever helpful Caducus x x x
Your ever helpful Caducus x x x