regarding some deleted poem...	22-Aug-03/8:15 AM
2nd and 3rd Stzas were a trip and a half - fantastic. Loved line7/9 and all of 3rd - I fell like alice, very polished, full of rich vivid language 9
Re: fragile by Bill Z Bub	22-Aug-03/8:17 AM
The fat belly suits this beauty 9
Re: A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos	22-Aug-03/8:24 AM
And isn't it amazing what 2000 quid will get you - a shot point blank in the face in Coventry where i be.
Re: -- by OneFingerAnswer	22-Aug-03/8:26 AM
nice pimple but you lose a point for not mentioning crimson rivers -its essential in a pimple- 9
Re: What you know by INTRANSIT	23-Aug-03/12:17 PM
As always your writing intrigues. I had a problem with line 2 its a bit of a flow killer. However the way you used lizard was good, though they tend to turret their eyes other than move due to their prey instict. The best for me was where you went with the message and your strength for me has always been that you have a strong beginning, middle, and end, a depth in words yet with a clarity of expression. 8
Re: Trollop: A Married Mans Revenge by DreamerSupreme	23-Aug-03/12:20 PM
Horus will love this. You just can't put the man down and he bleeds olive.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Aug-03/12:21 PM
I have made a note for me and my bro
Re: Manila by poetandknowit	17-Sep-03/2:44 AM
I can picture you sitting there absorbing the sights and sounds that fuelled the mood so well expressed in this poem. Yes, I absolutely love this. (God its nice being nice aint it?) ^10^
Re: Manila by poetandknowit	17-Sep-03/2:45 AM
Ever heard of hitting a nail on its head? rickshaws pedaling giddy tourists on goodwill jaunts along the slithers and scattered patches of asphalt.
Re: When my poems go platinum by horus8	24-Sep-03/8:14 AM
3rd part disturbed me deliciously so. 9
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Sep-03/8:16 AM
Very brief for you but all 3 lines complement each other and say what needed to be said so to an 8 i go.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Sep-03/8:17 AM
Easy on the happy pills joe. Some nice mome's and some not so nice but here is an anti-religion gold star 7
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Sep-03/8:19 AM
You KNOW you can do better than this, hate to do this but i gotta - 4
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Sep-03/8:21 AM
love the hard hail that kills, love hide like the sky (for they can't) its irony and ecstacy in one shot. Last part hits hard 9
Re: Junk by Bonehiss	29-Sep-03/9:13 AM
lyric ? it could be if you get a chorus.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Sep-03/9:13 AM
I've never lost a game yet - honest -
Re: Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	29-Sep-03/9:20 AM
Loved the opening. It reminded me of a pimple rap rant. Thanks for cheering me up on this miserable monday. 8
Re: Mother by jacqui	29-Sep-03/9:22 AM
Not bad t'all. Your problem though is line 1 ! its so cliched and by the time I got over it I had missed the following lines which are pretty good. There's no shame in a 7
Re: Involunarily yours, by jacqui	29-Sep-03/9:23 AM
Loads of potential but messy - very messy. 5
Re: Involunarily yours, by jacqui	29-Sep-03/9:25 AM
Line 2 is the type of line you need to use consistently. Line 6 is reader asphyxiation. Your ever helpful Caducus x x x