| Re: body image by http://mulberryfairy |
29-Sep-03/9:27 AM |
Gotta tell you sweetie - love your work 9.
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| Re: Love doggerel by thavimatola |
29-Sep-03/9:28 AM |
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29-Sep-03/9:32 AM |
Oh the end, the end ahhhhhh ! A belly laugh.
I have to say I enjoyed this poem, very rich full of detail, scene set with splendour and written with panache. From intro to end this has class -10-
Fucking A
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30-Sep-03/8:55 AM |
Kite-flyers running the rim of a hillside
Love it !
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| Re: Behind the veil by INTRANSIT |
1-Oct-03/1:12 AM |
add another 4 lines with the same rhyme as the first 2 , end it with 2 non rhyme lines and you have thee a sonnet !
As a poem - deluxe - the last line kind of crackles not explodes apart from that a dine squirt of ink 8
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| Re: Behind the veil by INTRANSIT |
1-Oct-03/1:12 AM |
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9-Oct-03/8:31 AM |
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Epic, romantic, a nuance fest.
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| Re: Ecohippie by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
9-Oct-03/8:32 AM |
i so cracked up at the last 2 lines of S4.
very modest but my mark sir is not - 8
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9-Oct-03/8:34 AM |
i'm knackered but some bits i likey and some bits i had to pinch myself to check i was in the same poem/prose/ thingy.
Meagan sounds cute.
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9-Oct-03/8:41 AM |
I don't think it deserves the crap mark of 4. I can see you've give it a shot, maybe you mean dank and not dang? think you need to edit.
Naughty rabbit. 6
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| Re: Erect Tongue of Excite by LuckyJoe |
9-Oct-03/8:48 AM |
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the poem bites but the title sucks like a long distance lover 6
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| Re: Erect Tongue of Excite by LuckyJoe |
9-Oct-03/8:48 AM |
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| Re: the meeting by richa |
9-Oct-03/8:50 AM |
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9-Oct-03/8:51 AM |
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What i don't understand i have felt and this cryptic comment you will find i like it -8
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| Re: Making Bread by Shardik |
9-Oct-03/8:54 AM |
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Yep ! sure floured my apron
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| Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8 |
10-Oct-03/9:02 AM |
In parts a similar vein to Tintagiles stuff - that can't be bad.
Lose the line about the blue collar sleeps as only we who know you know that.
Ahh unless of course your pajamas have blue lapelles - but you strike me as going 'commando' when u sleep.
Just don't ask me why i think these disturbing thoughts.
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| Re: sex sex sex! by FreeFormFixation |
10-Oct-03/9:04 AM |
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if you add the word no between each of the words in the title you would have written a short poem about my life.
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10-Oct-03/9:17 AM |
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Makes me want to hug a tree and light incense - very VERY nice Sire ! 9
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14-Oct-03/3:18 PM |
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| Re: Birdcalls by poetandknowit |
14-Oct-03/3:26 PM |
Loved the way you wrapped up S1 with the last 4 lines, speaks volumes about family values, appreciation of nature over social disdain.
Just one of those poems i want to read as i get something from it.
The last one of your poems was partly responsible for my poem 'Brighton Beach' i would appreciate your views on it good or bad.....Please.
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