Re: with no words to write by nentwined	17-Dec-02/11:18 AM
Singular "ether" maybe? Your last line--the change in rhythm--seems to fall flat. I like the idea of this a lot, just needs some refining, I think.
Re: Cecelia by Nicholas Monson	17-Dec-02/6:47 AM
"Audrey Hepburn with a Viking gene"--hee! Great fun and a technically (and otherwise) well-executed sonnet!
Re: a comment on Goes the Spoils by <~>	12-Dec-02/12:20 PM
Pepe's is for tourists, you know that. Don't forget the Anchor on your downtown tour--play some Patsy on the jukebox for me and Paola. Visit Mr Hezekiah Gilbert under the Green, he "who was educated at Yale College Where he graduated 1783 An early Death terminated His Studies & Literary Pursuits and called him into Eternity." And Tune Inn, but only if someone old school is playing and the bar's open. Alas, the Grotto. Ah, New Haven. Ah humanity.
Re: Danse by Limness	12-Dec-02/12:09 PM
Like the middle bits a lot, but the frame doesn't really work for me. My immediate reaction was "well, then, what are you going to tell me in this one?" and then you don't, you just dance around the room. Last stanza seems tacked on.
Re: a comment on alienheart by Bill Z Bub	11-Dec-02/12:28 PM
Pinwheel eye made me think of those those typical sci-fi- movie "shots-from-underneath" of the UFO, with the spinning bottom, like an eye. Of course, then it'd be "I look up at pinwheel eye" I suppose . . . but it worked for me as is.
Re: alienheart by Bill Z Bub	11-Dec-02/6:54 AM
Hee! I love this! Playful, adept, "true majic."
Re: cold sonnet by <~>	10-Dec-02/8:13 PM
One of my absolute favorites. It reads aloud like an incantation. 10
Re: To You, In Warmer Climes by <~>	10-Dec-02/9:11 AM
This is wonderful. I honestly think the "would have you here with me" lines in the first two stanzas weaken them--it's implicit in the "woulds" that he is not, and the penultimate lines are so strong it seems a shame not to let them stand. Maybe it's just me. Also, in the same vein, "badge of New England" is not as strong an image as "autumn's first blood" and seems to detract from it--you're winging south so must be north. I like the pun with Mercury.
Re: Missing the In-Between by <~>	10-Dec-02/8:29 AM
"We are warm together"--yegods, that's perfect. You and that lovely, earthy simplicity, damn you. Up to your usual standard.
Re: a comment on HATTIE by Nicholas Monson	7-Dec-02/11:46 AM
Excellent! Congratulations on its being published!
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/10:31 AM
Your right, or a privilege? (I've given up smiley emoticons, but one would go here if I hadn't.) And I didn't object to your poem at all--it is cute. Cute in the nice, nonpatronizing sense. (Again, no emoticons.) But I do give credit to people who live by their convictions, even those who are overbearing and evangelistic about them (though I cross the street when I see them coming), and while I do find that some vegans take things to extremes, you can really say that about anyone passionate about their beliefs, eh? God, I sound so fucking earnest, don't I? I'll lose my cynic badge. Not sure why I put my oar in anyway--for what it's worth, I have honey (crusty, crunchy like Boulder, CO, probably inedible) in my pantry at this very moment!
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/10:13 AM
on edit--make that "can't" just take them as things vegans often say. Arrgh.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/10:07 AM
Oh come on--I realize this is a difficult medium in which to convey humor or irony--or maybe it's just my failing--but both the sugar and fair and balanced comments were meant to do so. Of course I'm not fair and balanced about a lot of things--who is? And I can cite titles if you like, but I don't think the arguments I conveyed are so uncommon that you can just take them as "things that vegans often say." I have never heard a vegan say that the reason they didn't eat honey because the workers were oppressed by the queen; apparently you have. Okay, so we've established that. I objected to your pointing to that argument as an example of why most vegans shun honey, since it seemed to be a reason given less commonly than the less ludicrous (to my thinking) ones that I cited. I think that was clear in my original comment. Maybe I'm wrong--you seem to consort with more vegans than I do.
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/9:30 AM
Yes, we all have quirks. And honey stays out of the vegans' pantries, but not really out of anyone else's, since most people don't really take much notice of anything that might inconvenience them. So I don't really agree that my reporting of their argument (fair and balanced, that's me) proves your poem. Sugar, now, sugar oppresses!
Re: a comment on Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	7-Dec-02/8:39 AM
I realize this discussion is old, so pardon its resurrection. I just wanted to say that I've never heard that argument re: vegans and honey. From what I've read (I'm a vegetarian but not vegan), vegans shun honey because they feel that the honey production process is cruel--the stressing of the bees, sometimes the "dewinging" of the Queen, artificial insemination on so-called "rape rocks," etc. While I don't necessarily agree with all they say, having had a partner who kept bees, your explanation makes them all sound like nuts, and I don't think that's fair or accurate.
Re: The Poem, The Explanation, The Goodbye by Piano	7-Dec-02/8:18 AM
Excellent poem. The explanation was unnecessary and melodramatic. Good luck to you and your dignity.
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	7-Dec-02/8:10 AM
Wonderful! I think GW offers good advice regarding stopping after "new" in S4--you make your point with "rigidity" and "attack" later. "Clutched core" and the morning-madness kitty attack under the door are excellent. Not sure about the fold/gold/old rhyme--I'd probably drop it. Really like this.
Re: a comment on Fatty Nerd Trilogy by Agemo-Z	7-Dec-02/7:50 AM
Oh, all right! SCISSORS!
Re: a comment on idiots by w~* ATHENA *~w	6-Dec-02/12:35 PM
Led Zeppelin should get *some* credit for (at least inspiring) the first two lines; other than that, it's anyone's guess.
Re: HATTIE by Nicholas Monson	4-Dec-02/6:48 AM
You have a deft touch. Wonderful imagery.